Where did we go wrong?

many times when in our lives we found a relationship going on a wrong track but... we can only regret upon it..!!!!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

WHERE DID WE GO WRONG?

 

 

 

 

Where did we go wrong…..

Just tell me…

Where did we go wrong…..

I cherished each and every moment of ours…

When we were more than friends…

And used to talk for continuous hours…

I still remember the lanes…

Where we used to sing songs of our gains…

I still love the flavour of chocolate….

As that was once your favourite…

But,

Everything is so changed now…

Iam still walking through the same lanes….

With each broken piece of my heart, having the same pain…

No more songs of our promises….

No more empty lies of our gains…

Why these chocolates are full of sourness….

As even they knew the reason of your fakeness……

Where did we go wrong…..

Just tell me…

Where did we go wrong…..

My heart is still unwilling to believe that you’re gone….

Why did you left me alone…so alone….

These wounds they all are real….

Which even Time can’t heal….

Why you gave me such fake promises….

Promises about the unrealistic future of our lives….

Now Iam even afraid to love anyone again….

Because…..

I don’t want to walk alone on this same lane….

Having pieces of my heart into my hands….

Where did we go wrong….

Just tell me…

Where did we go wrong……

 

Once, Even I used to smile…

But now every relationship seems so unreal…

Yeah! I know the loss is all mine….

And for you there is a surprise......

See….. Iam still ALIVE………

I personally don’t want you to come back…

As you will surely laugh upon me….

Oh! See what you have done…

You made me a living LIE…

You made me a living LIE…..

These wounds won’t seem to heal…

This pain is just too real….

Where did I go wrong……

Just tell me…..

Where did I go wrong…..

Where did I go wrong……

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Reviews

[Kevin Andros]

It is a very touching poem my friend, especially when I know what exactly is going in your heart, in your mind. This poem Describes your state very clearly. You have a very special talent my freind, don't waste this. By reading this poem, my heart cries for you. I can't help it. Nor can any reader who reads your poem. Awsome compsition, keep it up! ~KA~

[mattavelli]

This is beautiful.
The emotions are strong and touching.
Take care.

[!!..Love..!!]

Firstly, I need to admit I simple loved the picture of this black rose at the end of the piece. And just like any other piece, I again melted my heart and made me realized where I was wrong or where he went wrong
A true piece from a true heart.


!!..Love..!!

[swarnita]

A very touching piece..
it touched the Bottom of my HEART!
Worth Reading....beautiful rhythm...n..just..i feel so small to comment upon it..
awesome job..keep writing..
-swar

[world war jessica <3]

I love how raw and honest this peice is. Anyone who has been hurt in a relationship can relate to this! A friend of mine says reviews should be like mini skirts; short enough to keep your interest but long enough to cover the goods! lol! so short and sweet, i enjoyed reading this! =)

[scotty]

Man that great, I felt the pain that in there, it use very strong and discripive wording, I'm just glad I took the time to read it, it was well worth it.

[munch]

this poem of urs made me think where i was wrong
and where he was wrong
did lack or did he?
wat so ever
that memories are my lyf
and the wound he gav will heal as ur poem says
ur poem describes not only ur fellin but feelin of all people who r facin a heartbreak
greaatttttttttttttt job

[Raef C. Boylan]

There are many touching aspects to this poem; there are also some well-crafted thoughts and concepts - for example, the chocolates souring as the relationship did.

"Promises about the unrealistic future of our lives�.
Now Iam even afraid to love anyone again�.
Because�..

I don't want to walk alone on this same lane�.
Having pieces of my heart into my hands�." - i think this section was the most affecting for me.

Good work. Very impassioned and raw.