I waited in the RAIN!!(part-II)

If you really wanna get this one, then you first gotta read " I waited in the Rain" http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/bhavya_kaushik/186309/

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I Waited in the RAIN!!! (Part-II)

 

 

 

 

Sound of thunder started ricocheting,

And it was raining all over again.

But this time the feel was mutating,

As…I began to overcome this pain.

 
Children were playing together in the rain,

And Birds were flying off the horizon.

But I won't make the same mistake again,

Suddenly I saw a girl playing a sweet nocturne.

 

I considered it as just a hallucination,

But she was real and I got thunderstruck.

Yes, it was the same day and same old station,

And I immediately ran to believe my luck

 

I looked into her eyes which were full of tears,

Neither she said a word nor do I ask a question.

Just her presence gave me the strength to fight my fears,

And we just looked at each other without any motion.

 

Gnarled and multitude leaves were falling with the rain,

But her soul was full of guilt and conviction.

As somehow we both experienced the same pain,

The same deadly and cursed emotion.

 

 

And finally its time for me to rewrite my poem-"I waited in the rain" with lines-

 

 

"I looked outside my window pane,

A girl was standing alone in the rain.

I remember the day when she didn't came,

And everyone thought that I went out of my brains.

But finally today I will erase this pain,

As….She finally came...

Yes…She finally came…"

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

The inspiration behind this one is basically my own write "I waited in the rain" lolz.. :D
So...If you haven't read that one..SO..here is the link for "I waited in the rain"
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/bhavya_kaushik/186309/

:)

Reviews

[Innocent]

You know for reading this write I actually first read the first part of this piece.
And after reading both of your writes I came up with a conclusion that you've actually written a short story through your poems which is such an amazing thing.
Here also, I found great imagery and got a feeling that as if I'm also there in the rain with you guys.
I'm also happy that finally love came to you, may be after facing so much suffering. But, it finally came and you ended it in such a beautiful way.
And I really found that if anyone really wanna get this piece the she/he first must read its first part.
Beautiful and a very brilliant write.

[Karl]

Oh wow! another flawless writing.

[Together]

This is exactly what a sequeal should be like and I really loved it, Journey ending in a lovers meeting!

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

full of emotion - fantastic piece - great images (i could see the kids playing in the rain)
beautifully done

[!!..Love..!!]

"I waited in the rain" was my favourite and will always be..
This is really a sequel to it..and is real kind of sequel..with which I can relate..
I don't know but why I'm getting out of my words!
See...that's the effect of your write to me ^-^
Awesome dude!

[Imperfection]

I do not know how you manage to find such appropriate pictures for each one of your writings. The beauty of your poems lies in your uninhibited expression. You let the emotions flow so freely when you write.
Great imagery too.

[Just Manoosh]

Oh, you devil, this was beautiful.
Mx

[Blue Rose]

I liked this squeal because I love your first write and thus could relate myself with it.
Beautiful flow and lovely ending!

[RaindropsRoses93]

Well I am really glad to hear that you did a second edition of "I Waited In The Rain" because I think that is one of my favorites of yours. I am also love this poem to, it flows very well as a sequel should so I think you did a great job. Thanks for sharing!

[Nicholas Hallows]

I agree with innocent. The imagery is really strong and your poems are a kind of short story... or perhaps the opening chapters of a much longer one? I too had to reread part 1 and then come back to this... but I am glad I did because it really makes you appreciate this part all the more.
Well written!
NH

[Blackbeats]

I actually needed to read the first part for this, but then I found it very much deep and related.
Though I'm not such a fan of happy endings but still I liked this one.
Great work dude.