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Where did I go wrong?


A Poem by Bhavya Kaushik
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A song lyric :)
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WHERE DID I GO WRONG?

 

 

 

Whenever I asked you this question you remained quiet,

But now I have realized,

Where did I go wrong?

And “where were you right?

 

{Verbal acoustics}

 

I just got into my bed alone tonight,

With the bed still made up on your side.

And I count days like years and months like centuries,

With dry tears flowing from my eyes like dead autumn leaves.

 

Since now I have realized,

Where did I go wrong?

 

Ah huh, ah huh huh…

{Verbal acoustics}

 

It felt so great when you were by my side,

And how we used to held each other so tight.

Gone are those days and I’m left with pain,

Since I have realized that you won’t be back again.

 

Because it was just me who went wrong,

It was just me who went wrong.

 

Ah huh, ah huh huh…

{Verbal acoustics}

 

 

I was just so wrong when I let you go,

And let you walk away from my life.

Forever and ever and ever……

 

 

(Piano solo)

 

 

Since now I have realized,

Where did I go wrong?”

And “where were you right?”

 

I was just so wrong when I let you go,

And let you walk away from my life.

Forever and ever and ever……

 

(Fades out…)

 

 

 


© 2009 Bhavya Kaushik



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Have you tried your hand at lyrics before? I'm unable to recall if I've read lyrics from you before this.
This is a good one…
You've captured a range of emotions here. Overwhelming feelings….the longingness, pining, regret and love.

The line that touched me most is - I was just so wrong when I let you go…
It surely has a reverberating effect.

Well, the remaining part of the piece is just as effective. The visuals your words create are fantastic too.
Consider this as an example:
I just got into my bed alone tonight,
With the bed still made up on your side.
And I count days like years and months like centuries,
With dry tears flowing from my eyes like dead autumn leaves.

And yet the piece doesn't seem quite whole to me…since I don't yet know how the song will sound like.

The pictures again are appropriate. I loved the first one…the person singing the song, maybe?
Yes. I believe so.

Good attempt.

P. S. I think you meant quiet in the first line (as opposed to quite).


Posted 12 Months Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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