But I can't remember me...

 

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

But I can’t remember me…

 

 

I so clearly remember the past,

And still memorize every single day.

But now everything is turning into ashes,

And I only bleed pain along my way.

 

I know that I still exist in this brutal world,

But I barely know now who I am?

Here in nothingness I stand,

Where my life seems only like a game.

 

In my dreams you are always mine,

But in my life you are just a dream.

I only remember you and your name,

Which I only cry and scream.

 

In front of any mirror whenever I stand,

There is a stranger whom I see.

I still remember you...you… and you….

But… I can’t remember me…

 

But I can’t remember me…

 

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Wow...this is so very powerful. It is full of the torment of life. It is strange how most everyone at some point in their life faces an identity crisis. Sometimes it is hard to remember who we are through the pain. If we are not careful, the pain even becomes our identity. Then for sure it is harder to let go of our pain and heal. It is a scary thing to not be sure of who you are. Kudos on a tremendous write!

[Victoria Harlequin]

I immediately got sucked into this poem at the first line. Excellent write, just plain marvelous!

[Vrushali Ohatker]

Beautiful! Beautiful is what I can say. You've lost yourself in this world. In her it is that you've lost yourself. Happens once in everybody's life.

Good work Bhavya! Loved it!!

[Emily B]

one day, you will remember, you may even meet yourself all over again. It will be a good day.

[mystic soul]

beautiful poem........ well versed...... the repetitions that u gave in your poem enhanced it's beauty........

[sudeshna]

when i read this poem i felt that someone stole my words.. i mean to say presently i also can't remember me... i really liked your writings...

[Elanra]

I am going thru your poems too cus I wanted to if your poems are all like the one on your profile which I am simply in love with, and without a surprise I discovered you are good at poetry as well.

I am sorry.. The word "good" coming from who claims to be writing poems and a messed up novel is just immensly incompetent. It of course isnt good. Its just achingly beautiful and also painful. The edge of madness in it made want to clutch at my hair. Its a beating poem which leaves you purple all over. And yet you love it cus it beats you so artistically! You cant help admiring it.

the way u use colors and pics makes it even more effective.

Kudos Bhavya...

[Kayla]

This was really good!! I like the topic that you chose. Identity crisis is a big problem. Alot of people don't know who they are until the discover or even re-discover themselves.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Love the images and the poems...

[MoonlitAngel]

Sad, lonely, and it screams want and emotion from every line. I think this is a very gentle and somber poem, expressing one's deepest thoughts. Wow... That did not sound like something I would say. Wow... Um, lol.. This was something I can honestly say I relate too. I know I'm 12 (cry) but I have really REALLY strong feelings towards this one guy I know, and I can NOT stop thinking about him. I mean seriously! If I'm going to think about him this much, why live? Ok, not seriously... I'm not going to take my life for something like that. I'll wait for the right moment to sacrifice my life. Sorry..going into fanstasy world again, where something interesting actually happens in my life. Annnyyyways... Extremly good poem, and a favorite at that.

--Blood

[Theresa]

This is very well written and a great example of how talented you are. I felt the emotion in your words and it really sucked me in right from the beginning. It's scary how life along with the pain you endure can turn you into someone you can no longer recognize. Truly a great write. Thanks for sharing.