My Lost Candle

My Lost Candle

A Chapter by Bhavya Kaushik





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 †The Evanescent screams†


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† My Lost Candle†

 

 

I can’t see light within myself,


There is darkness everywhere.


The flame within me has extinguished,


And I no longer can find my lost candle.




 

The candle which guided me everywhere,


Has been lost now with my hope.


I’m lost without it, I do not know where to go,


And I can not find my way back to home.




 

I’m frozen now and I can not breathe,


I can’t walk now even with a cradle.


I’m just living but I’m not alive,


Without my hope, without my lost candle.








© 2010 Bhavya Kaushik



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I am crash..and in pain I came here looking for love.. and I find.. you sad and broken.. alone like a candle left in a cemetery.. can't stand your pain.. It's not human.. and this is killing me.. so sad.. I can't say much.. no words can speak about how i feel... this words are crashing me..and I can;t stop crying.. I can't .. I cry for you.. and I do not even know you..

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I am crash..and in pain I came here looking for love.. and I find.. you sad and broken.. alone like a candle left in a cemetery.. can't stand your pain.. It's not human.. and this is killing me.. so sad.. I can't say much.. no words can speak about how i feel... this words are crashing me..and I can;t stop crying.. I can't .. I cry for you.. and I do not even know you..

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This last one is the least amazing one in the last four poems... But it is still amazing... I mean if i was asked to rank these last four poems, this one would be the fourth... It has nothing wrong in it or nothing u had done wrong. Well except this:
"I’m lost without it, I do not know where to go,
And I can not find my way back to home."

you can say "back home"... you dont have to add "to" in between. tho thats just a suggestion... ^_^

Good job again Bhavya... you keep amazing me.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Every so touching and wonderful.
There is no doubbt you are my favorite poet by far.
you can write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Lost, alone, in an eternal wait....isn't it what that sums you up.
I’m just living but I’m not alive,
Without my hope, without my lost candle

beautiful lines...!

Posted 7 Years Ago



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