My Lost Candle

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 †The Evanescent screams†

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† My Lost Candle†

 

 

I can’t see light within myself,

There is darkness everywhere.

The flame within me has extinguished,

And I no longer can find my lost candle.

 

The candle which guided me everywhere,

Has been lost now with my hope.

I’m lost without it, I do not know where to go,

And I can not find my way back to home.

 

I’m frozen now and I can not breathe,

I can’t walk now even with a cradle.

I’m just living but I’m not alive,

Without my hope, without my lost candle.

Reviews

[MagiCrystal]

I am crash..and in pain I came here looking for love.. and I find.. you sad and broken.. alone like a candle left in a cemetery.. can't stand your pain.. It's not human.. and this is killing me.. so sad.. I can't say much.. no words can speak about how i feel... this words are crashing me..and I can;t stop crying.. I can't .. I cry for you.. and I do not even know you..

[Elanra]

This last one is the least amazing one in the last four poems... But it is still amazing... I mean if i was asked to rank these last four poems, this one would be the fourth... It has nothing wrong in it or nothing u had done wrong. Well except this:
"I’m lost without it, I do not know where to go,
And I can not find my way back to home."

you can say "back home"... you dont have to add "to" in between. tho thats just a suggestion... ^_^

Good job again Bhavya... you keep amazing me.

[deeps]

Every so touching and wonderful.
There is no doubbt you are my favorite poet by far.
you can write.

[Brokensoul]

Lost, alone, in an eternal wait....isn't it what that sums you up.
I’m just living but I’m not alive,
Without my hope, without my lost candle

beautiful lines...!