Words Left Unsaid

Its about a girl who is a one sided love with a boy..She never had told about this to the boy and she somehow lost him..She wants him to be her last wish before death..

Its may be the destiny:
That a part of me is within you
Being with you am without you.
A solmenly feeling is dying around us
But no one speaks.

A kind of refuse to this love
Still a silence acceptance prevails.
No wonder how it feels,
Let the inside soul glorify,
With the burning feelings
With the crushing expectations,
With a cry of a soul..
No matter what?
A soul is dying
A love is rejected
A feeling is crushed
But who cares....

She speaks,no one hears
She cries,no one cares
She dies,no one's bothered
Everything happens,infront of everyone..
She dies within herself,blames no one
With all those pain she might survive
But not from inside.
She is a broken piece
Her physical presence does not bothered much.

Her silence make her speak to
crushing all her hope.
Breaking all those expectations
She says:
"And there where I live
where now only love remains
Its a letter from a soul
to her beloved".

Author's Note

What do you think about the love of a soul is more important then a love of heart..?

Reviews

[Haseo]

I am not going to compliment it just to make you feel good, I am going to be honest with you.
HERE WE START
in general its good, but I lost the feeling that keeps me attracted to it
using a lot of "is" in a poem really kills it
for example , Instead of:
A soul is dying
A love is rejected
A feeling is crushed
you should write
a dying soul
a rejected love
a crushed feeling
also another comment about the first line "Its may be the destiny", now Destiny can't be describe by The since its not an object.
for English speakers who will understand directly how to read it, is very beautiful poem and for me I liked it, but for non English speakers, its hard to feel what depth you meant.
sorry if this review is depressing but I really want to read more from you and your typing
hope you can advance better, Best regards,

[Bidya Palai]

No dear ..I m lucky there are few people who r there to correct and guide me when m wrong ...Thankyou dear for your review..will try my best to get your compliment in my next poem... Thankyou dear ☺☺☺

[Akshita]

You have described the feelings of the girl so vividly! I really liked the poem

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou akshita for the review.😊

[M P Ramesh]

bidya,





go on writing letters specially meant for him and get them replied often in order to keep fire inside protected and spread flame outside
writer succeeeds when the flame takes around you.....................both

carry onnnnnnnnnnn


mp

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou so much ☺ for the encouragement so that I can put the pain into words☺☺

[Ayushi Beura]

U have beautifully described the feelings of the story...ur words are touching my heart..well done

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou ayushi ...I fl like I have done a bit work to touch your emotions☺☺☺

[samparks,sam]

Dedication more important than love, Love so easy work to say, but dedication create day by day. Love is implied in dedication. Which can't see just but released after some time By heart.

[Sahil Krishnan]

👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👍🏻proud of u sis.....keep up d good work 👌🏻

[Karel]

Very moving and sad, almost tragic , really. I feel deeply touched by your poem.

[Bidya Palai]

Thankyou ☺Karel for your review ...♡♡