Crushed

 

I’m so sick and tired of losing,

Having the short end of the stick.

I’m always the one to finish last,

And let me tell you, it makes me sick.

 

I’m the one with the heavy load,

The girl trapped with a broken heart.

Nothing ever seems to go quite right,

I never feel that pretty or that smart.

 

I’ve been let down too many times,

I’ve been told I’m not good enough.

He tells me that I can’t change a thing,

But my heartache is what makes me tough.

 

I wish I could stand on my own,

I only wish I could make you see.

You’ve hurt me beyond what I can bear,

I hate this hold you have over me.

 

Everything has become blurry,

Through the tears shining in my eyes.

I hope someday you can understand,

Those were promises I made, not lies.

Reviews

[John Stussy]

my gf went through kind of the same thing, being told she wasn't good enough. the important thing is to disregard what those guys say, they are miserable people trying to bring everyone else lower. true, you may not be finding that happiness you seek right now, but it will come. just have to give it time. there's not too many good guys, and we are slow to come around, but one of us will come round to you. :P ok, enough of me sounding conceited, what i'm trying to say is don't grow cold from this, that's easy to do. yes, close your heart a bit more, be more guarded, but don't become impregnable. learn to give small parts of your heart rather than the whole, and wait a while, a few months at least, to give all of yourself in a relationship. hope my words help a little. :)

[Nicholas Hallows]

This poem has a great consistent rhythm and flowed perfectly.

I never feel that pretty or that smart.

I've been let down too many times,
I've been told I'm not good enough.
He tells me that I can't change a thing,

Never let another person define who you are or become so much a part of you the emotions become blurred - as you seemed to have realised through this experience. (I'm not sure if this poem is written from experience, but it seems honest). If we are good enough for ourselves and content with who we are then nothing else really matters and no one can have any kind of hold over us (cheesy but true).

Very good write.

NH

[Tania Leigh]

Don't ever, ever, ever lose sight of yourself for someone else. Always remember that in the end, all you really have is you. If you give too much of yourself away, no matter how much you love somebody, they will have a power over you, as you stated in your poem.

Good, passionate write here

[smiggle wiggle]

Intense! I love it! I love the ending where you made the font bigger and bolder!! Great job!