pain

When one is hurting,

aside from the pain,

doubts seem endless.

Everything bottled inside.

 

Just like a volcano

spewing lava,

anger is hidden,

Rage is found everywhere.

You keep silent,

trying to put up a brave face.

too many masks being put on,

Which is the real you?

 

Out of the blue,

out of nowhere,

the bomb suddenly exploded.

There is nothing to do.

 

But to cry endlessly

and wishing that hell be over.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Falling into silence only makes the thoughts we have all the louder. When anger appears, there is no hiding place and the pressure builds into its inevitable conclusion. A never ending cycle of confusion and frustration.
Sometimes, all that is needed is one voice. Unfortunately, sometimes the bomb is always destined to explode, no matter what.

[sette]

totally true,i like your profile pix.. very unique like a surrealist or picasso inspired?

[Lorry]

Just trying to add an air of mystery. Thought as I am sick of looking at my face, everyone else would be :)

[sette]

hahaha.. very mysterious actually

[DIVYA]

There is a contrast in the third and fourth verses that jolts the reader. That is needed to convey the anger and frustration felt. Indeed, one can't wait to get over it all. Powerful words, sette.

[sette]

thanks friend for the wonderful review.

[April Blue]

Great poem, my favorite part is, "But to cry endlessly and wishing that hell be over." I recently have had a lot of pain in my life and this poem hit home for me...

[sette]

thanks and I do empathize with you on that. thanks for the wonderful review

[θεά]

Wow! I can totally empathize with and relate to this piece. True, how we endure and battle with our inner demons and sometimes the best thing to do is to accept and succumb to the gush of emotions within us. To start anew.

Very well penned!

[sette]

thanks for wonderful review and so true with what you have said.

[Davidgeo]

Not bad. Not a great flow in my opinion, it didn't read smoothly. But that's irrelevant in this case the content makes up for that.

On the final line, "and wishing that hell be over"... I imagine you're talking about a male person (he'll) but there is a chance it could be confused with 'hell'... I'd throw that apostrophe in there (or capitalize the H if you actually do mean hell).

[sette]

the hell is hell for me because of the pain he gave me thanks for the review

[Jimmy Yetts]

Don't cry much.
There's a difference between pain and injury; pain don't hurt.
An eloquently conveyed poem!

[sette]

yes that is true my friend

[Ghost]

Yes, this is so close to home for me that I am just so afraid of the explosion.. Powerful write for me, thank you for sharing..

[sette]

yup once the bomb ticked off it can be a big problem thanks for the wonderful review my friend

[Anise]

I can feel this one for sure, pain bottled up and slowly building until it erupts and eventually settles.
It's all part of the process, as you have described here so beautifully.

[sette]

thanks for the wonderful review

[Anise]

you are welcome