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A Poem by BLitZeD

I didnt exactly accomplish what i wanted to
its like a fucked up version of the story i was trying to pull you into
with knights of glory
in tired nights of glory
fight knights of glory
in nights of glory 
to tell knights the next night with glory
confidence of an unknown calliber 
rush in first from the stone drawing Excaliber
how with her tone, i could get loud with her
 wind in the sail for sure, hail could burn down with her
Al Capone around with her ,so back to the glory n how i was so down for her
i tried to rewrite love
this is my horror story 
the words came up short 
far fetched with a ill beat
a map of recourse 
but the chorus was still weak
pen lay still for weeks, even the ink was mad
as it witnessed a corpse, track lay dead on the pad 
it weeps it cried, the paper was sad 
cant sleep it tried it scribbles it drags
the tone doesn't change, dead end riddles and snags
cant even type, the f*****g hour glass lags 
Windows are broke, Chrome shooting blanks
powers on real fast but the connection still hangs

© 2015 BLitZeD



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loved the raw honest and unpretentious tone and tempo this imprinted..loved it..curtsy bow

Posted 3 Years Ago


BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

thank you very much 4 the kind words
It's ok, to many nights and glory for me. No hate, just honesty.


Posted 3 Years Ago


BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

all good, i felt the same way at first but it kinda grew on me
decent freestyle writing good work


Posted 3 Years Ago


BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

ty, i always appreciate your time
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blitzkrieg, This is actually a great piece of writing! Intensity blistering each line, emotions right on the surface, an honest write from the heart. You've got some skills, b. Keep working with them, push your thoughts from mind to pen (keyboard), tie them up with a big string of sighs. take care...dan

Posted 3 Years Ago


BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

thank you sir
Your writing style is beautiful and your wording is on point sir/not sir! I love this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

thank u much :)
Ball pen knight fighting with an ASCII sword on blank page battlefield Words came short but ideas found their target. Mission accomplished! Pick the prize, get the girl, pass by ''GO'' but do not collect $200.00 ( sorry, you wish!)

Posted 3 Years Ago


BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

a ball pen knife fighting with an ASCII sword on a blank page battlefield....epic comment, i once ag.. read more
You made me lose my appetite , And this feeling in my gut? I'm literally rubbing my stomach trying to make it stop.. I don't know what the hell just happened but I need to come back to this again.. with a well thought out review

Posted 3 Years Ago


silent poet

3 Years Ago

you once said I read too deep into things but yet, YOU send me to read DEEP into things?! lol but no.. read more
BLitZeD

3 Years Ago

i told you you read too deep so you would read deeper

http://www.writerscafe.org/wri.. read more
silent poet

3 Years Ago

Trust me I always do.. I enjoyed this

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BLitZeD
BLitZeD

New Jersey Devil, FL



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