L00k @ M3 N0w Pt.2

The fight would be unfair/

Tortoise vs The Hair/

Magic saw to a contortionist/ 

A box so small its hard to miss, the sights so hard to bear/

Attractions law, gravity, Newtons wrong/ 

Black hole , dark matter, hits from the bong/ 

God particle, mythology's methodical/ 

Set sail were nautical, hits like Allie, my methods logical/ 

Square rout some collar bones, change um out periodical/

Table holds the plans , set so diabolical/ 

Numbers place values that are atomical

Death tolls astronomical, designed to break you down/

/Anatomical/

Decomposer, accelerated, decay rates phenomenal/ 

the reaper holds ya, Hells are raided, relay saints feigns an goblins too/

The time is soon, the pourpous true, reckoning will come before high noon

Reviews

[Jordan]

...meh. It's not award winning. Or particularly great. Sure it rhymes but it doesn't make sense. Even NWA lyrics have meaning and are accurate. I guess this is due to YMCMB. "rap doesn't matter as long as it rhymes!"

It takes more than rhymes to make poems and raps. You need substance. Real meat.

[BLitZeD]

?? its cool that u dont like it but its not just random words that rhyme, there's meaning behind it all

[Jordan]

I get that. But there's a lot of junk mixed in with it.

[BLitZeD]

no, i think your misinterpreting subliminal lines, i get what your saying but the whole thing is just 1 story about warfare on a molecular level . either way i promise each part was thought out lol, but i still agree not the best of mine

[Jordan]

Maybe so. At least you can take criticism. That's the important part.

[Emily]

Very nice wording!
Well done!!

[Mitali Shah]

Blitzed must say you always come out with something new. Good one. Thanks for sharing

[Not here]

the whole thing was great but i especially liked the middle few lines, which all ended with -ical. great rhyming, great message. keep it up

[B]

I love it
Seems like the most unfair fight of all time
Surely shows a lack of nobility
For one should never fight unless they are certain their opponent is on equal stance to fight back

Bravo

[R Smith]

fascinating work mate, the reaper, high noon, it's all about to fall on us :)

[E G TEN]

Poetic justice you had versed, Angles over Bars, multi over angles
Bars over world play, a complete package all through out,
Allies hit I wouldn't take, but ill take that hit from the bong":-)
Very cool Thanks! "And thanks again"

[dan]

This is a really tight write, I like the irregular rhyme patterns and some lines really stick out ("Magic saw to a contortionist...") I'm not sure that I'm crazy about the misspellings, even if they're intentional. I don't think they really add any emphasis to the lines. Another one that stands out? ("Black hole, dark matter, hits from the bong...") You can pass that bong over this way and God only knows how good this review could be. take care...dan

[wordman]

you might be right,hell hound is on the loose