Do You See Them?

Fly high like a kamikaze, let them die like holocaust bodies

I'll pause here for my applause, freeze, paparazzi 

Please please, it was just one line geeze.  

Nazi zombies, a group of three headed east threw the trees. 

Dismember and claim the head like that bat that versed Ozzy

Eyes born In Oz but the lion I see

Isn't a coward, just understands he lacks immortality

He's not like the gods of Greece, 

Demi at best even within his own reality..

A rapidly expanding galaxy that disagrees to the third degree 

Happily just standing by to see the miss-belief, 

Absurd deceased in a herd two clicks east 

Disbelief before his eyes, a planet that's diseased

Earth, the planet of the beasts

Earth, the world that has no peace,

Unable to sin, how would you when

The dead freely roam the streets

Reviews

[BlaqkShadow]

So well written, very intense and brutal in it's delivery, I think my favourite line is "Eyes born In Oz but the lion I see
Isn't a coward, just understands he lacks immortality" because of it's implications , that the understanding of mortality makes us relalise our place in the world which is a fearful thing, excellent work! x

[Terrence Chang]

Well written. The wording are vivid how ever it lack some kind of point I feel like the the two paragraph doesn't match well. This is with I think Blitzed. Hope you don't mind my criticism.

[BLitZeD]

na man i actualy like it when people tell me wut they really think instead of just commenting on the ones they liked. i agree it does lack an explenation of transition, i was pretty fucked up when i wrote it but long story short since im short on time at the moment first paragraph is him following orders hunting the zombies and sucking up all the praise that is given to him for doing his job. second paragraph is him realizing that just because its his job dose not make it the right thing to do. the catch in this is the zombies are not zombies. just a meda4 for enemies that we are trained as a country to expect to be hostile, similar to how everyone sees zombies now since they are high at the list in pop culture at the moment . thanks for reading and keeping your opinion real

[Terrence Chang]

Oh I see it now. Thank you for your explanation

[annalysiar]

This has that lyrical feel with a great plot I like the message

[Peyton Light]

I could imagine this as an awesome rap song :) I love the words you use. Saying stuff like "Holocaust Bodies" really shows how much effort went into this :)

[θεά]

Walking dead, eh?

Very pacy, very graphic and has the right element of macabre in it to instill dread in the faint-hearted. Nice attempt, B. Thanks for sharing.

Best,
M.

[BLitZeD]

yes walking dead, or more accurately walking soon to be dead. zombies are not actually zombies in this just a metaphor for how we treat and see others

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Well Blitzed, I'm not really feeling this one as much. It's not the creativity. It's quite ingenious in it's word manipulation (miss-belief) ect. Love that part. Love the clever artistry, very vivid in it's expression. You are certainly gifted, dear poet. Maybe it's just the message...I'm not exactly sure if I'm getting it. Sounds high and mighty. Are you saying, kill the thoughtless stupidity? I could seriously dig it then. Some people, (not all)...they just don't see what's coming, liking the illusion of it's not happening. These people need Toto to pull the curtain back, so to speak. I'll tell you what I know, THEY have no power that we don't give them. It's simple, end war...do nothing. Bombs need builders and pilots. It's all an illusion, the "great and powerful Oz" Iceland took their country back. We just aren't tired enough of their fiat bullshit yet. IMO

[BLitZeD]

To be honest, I felt the same way when it was done and almost didn't post it. unlike my other writings the meaning of this is vague. its more or less a story and yall can take what you will out of it. But yes i also wasn't feeling it.

Explanation;
To me the zombies arn't real zombies... But they are the walking dead, just not dead yet.

The guy tracking them: in the first part
Plays into it and does his "job" setting up to take the zombies out because zombies are as everyone knows expendable being
1.Already dead
2.always a lot and obviously they are hostile.
3. just like everyone now a days is well educated on zombie apocalypses thanks to T.V you kill them because that's what your supposed to do.

He comes to his senses in the second half and realizes they are not zombies but actual human lives and questions the integrity of his mission and Sees the severity of the problem with Earth truly being the planet of the beasts.

I think because of your comment im going to add a third part maybe later or tomorrow depicting someone watching the tracker guy and seeing him as a zombie. or maybe the three in the trees notice him and see him as a zombie.

sorry went a bit overboard on the explanation

[Yurie Lee]

Whhhooooaaaaa this is a really nice poem you have here~ Nice wording and fluency and everything like wooooow~!

But I have to ask why is most of the poem highlighted in that gray color? Is there an effect on here that allows that?

But maaaaan this is a nice poem~!

[BLitZeD]

thank you very much. Im not sure what you mean highlighted in grey tho. when i look at it nothings highlighted

[iamshadowine]

wow! got amazed by this poem of yours! :D i loved it really very very much....
"Earth, the planet of the beasts
Earth, the world that has no peace,
Unable to sin, how would you when
The dead freely roam the streets"
these lines are very impressive i must say.... :DD
keep writing

[BLitZeD]

thanks , always a plus when people like it lol :) sent you a friend request, highly appreciated

[dan]

BLitZ3D, My first thought after reading this was, "He may have been inspired by that new movie coming out called 'Pride.Predjudice.Zombies.'" Your word play and rhyme scheme dazzle me like always; I especially like the way you invent a word then hyphenate it (miss-belief) giving it a whole new twist than if it had been an actual word. Twists like that give a piece more sudden impact, makes it more thought provoking ("What die he MEAN?") A+ sum total, makes this piece so strong, immortal. take care...dan

[BLitZeD]

no, i didnt even know about that until u just said something, im about to go check the trailer out tho cuz i do love me some zombie movies. and if you think about it a zombie as we know it is as of right now not possable butttttt lets say if rabies virus mutated a bit you would have a theoretical living zombie. thanks for the review man, always a pleasure. make sure you check out "cyber-con" "Midas Touch" and "B-82" i just posted them all yesterday and the rhyming/flow is on another level, i know you will like them

[BLitZeD]

The raid was long, snipers, bombs;
Dirty, Nuclear, Neutron, Hydrogen, Napalm.

[dan]

Oh, I'll get to "Midas Touch" and "B-82." I have to jump around and honor my other read requests too. I always review 'em all! take care...dan