Were all trash

Were all trash

We steal from one another

We lie to each other

We betray the ones we love

 

We think "god" will save us

We pray for salvation but it never comes

We need to believe in something so we dont feel alone

 

We only help ourselfs in the long run

Were all alone in the long run

We fear for our transgressions in the long run

Author's Note

Not finished clearly

Reviews

[RedInk524]

This is something I write and rant so much about. You gotta love how despicable and worthless a majority of people are. Yet, with their ignorant and ridiculous mistakes you can learn so much so that you don't join them. If there is a god I don't think he wants anything to do with us.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a stark honesty here... lives of pain and anguish unfolding... a loneliness that cannot be overcome... a drowning sense of existence... How I used to live each line and letter... Powerful and profound.

[ATG]

A very good poem so far. The only I would suggest possibly changing is the repetion of "long run" in the last stanza. It seems to break up the flow a bit. Despite that very minor, questionable flaw, this poem was very well written. I did like the concept behind it. It gave a good sense of pessimism behind it.

[Elizabeth Kerns]

It's good. I don't know maybe you could finish it like this,

We only help ourselves in the end.
Were all alone in the long run.
We fear for our transgressions at dusk.

[itai]

Lol!