Cold Blooded

Cold Blooded

A Poem by k
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"If you cut me open, my blood is ice cold".

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I bite my tongue

as you whisper into my skin.

There’s no one to blame,

except maybe me.

I wish you’d go

so I could breathe.

I wish I knew

what was wrong with me.

Two years in this prison

that once felt like a paradise.

Now it’s just like hell.

One year passed in the blink of an eye

the second felt like a f*****g lifetime.

A lifetime of no air,

I haven’t taken a breath

since the day that we first met.

This thing that keeps you alive

is slowly killing me.

If you cut me open,

my blood is ice cold

which means I’m not afraid

to flip the script.

I hope you don’t believe for a second

that I’m not selfish enough

to raise the ocean two inches,

even if it means drowning you,

as long as it gets my boat

off the shore.

If I have to cut your air off

to finally taste oxygen again

then you’d better practice

holding your breath.

I told you I’m sorry

but I don’t regret it at all.

I’d kill you a hundred more times

if I could use your corpses

to build a staircase to freedom.

I’m a bird trapped

in a tiny metal cage.

This is the song I sing

as I slowly go insane.

But you don’t understand

and you don’t see that anything is wrong,

even as the colors melt out

of my feathers,

dripping like wax onto the floor.



© 2017 k



Author's Note

k
Thanks for reading, criticism is welcome!
DISCLAIMER: Since I've already been blocked by at least two people for this poem, please remember that poetry is exaggerated and it's a dangerous game to assume the views of a speaker in a poem are the same as those of the author. Assuming that this is 100% how I feel is as ridiculous as reading a book about a serial killer and assuming the author kills people. If you take issue with how I express myself through this work, please let me know in a constructive manner. If this poem isn't your cup of tea, that's fine. Lets celebrate our differences in style! Thank you for keeping an open mind!

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Yes, that age old and reoccurring theme, stagnation, suffocating in a relationship, worse too, when one of the twosome is unaware of the other's dire dilemma and is parasitic as opposed to symbiotic, yes, time for remedial action and vacate the scene for sake of both parties!

Exquisite metaphors and similes throughout that emphasis the subject's frustration, despair and daily humiliation!

Perhaps me being pedantic, but a two year relationship, first year good, like paradise' then, ' ' ' 'haven’t taken a breath since the day that we first met' seems a contradiction in terms?



Posted 1 Month Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

k

1 Month Ago

Thank you for your review! I'll work on clearing up the lines you pointed out.



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Very good! My favorite of yours

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


This is so good. Hard place to be and the reader felt the bleeding and hardness of the person. Some people can be dangerous. Temptation create by mystery and unknown. Thank you K for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is one of the most beautiful pieces of work I've read in a good while. You've seemingly captured the essence of someone going insane, and it's so visible in these lines. I applaud.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really enjoyed this. I write similarily to you in some ways. I feel you 100% and how you are expressing makes sense to me. Great minds think alike. I like the dark eerie sorts of writing that leave you wondering. Nice job.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For all those Harry Potter nerds out there, does this not sound like a member of Slytherin wrote it? Not saying that meaning that all Slytherins are bad people; just feel like this is how someone in that house would respond to a bad relationship. They're known for being ambitious and cunning. They do what it takes. Seriously, these lines though:

I hope you don’t believe for a second
that I’m not selfish enough
to raise the ocean two inches,
even if it means drowning you,
as long as it gets my boat
off the shore.
If I have to cut your air off
to finally taste oxygen again
then you’d better practice
holding your breath.
I told you I’m sorry
but I don’t regret it at all.
I’d kill you a hundred more times
if I could use your corpses
to build a staircase to freedom.

Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

k

1 Month Ago

Thank you :D
You sound like a murderous brat....
And a total low life THUG.
Never leave a comment on my work again !

BACK OFF........... CHILD


Posted 1 Month Ago


0 of 3 people found this review constructive.

A life without air
Wiithout future
Better to leave

Posted 1 Month Ago


Yes, that age old and reoccurring theme, stagnation, suffocating in a relationship, worse too, when one of the twosome is unaware of the other's dire dilemma and is parasitic as opposed to symbiotic, yes, time for remedial action and vacate the scene for sake of both parties!

Exquisite metaphors and similes throughout that emphasis the subject's frustration, despair and daily humiliation!

Perhaps me being pedantic, but a two year relationship, first year good, like paradise' then, ' ' ' 'haven’t taken a breath since the day that we first met' seems a contradiction in terms?



Posted 1 Month Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

k

1 Month Ago

Thank you for your review! I'll work on clearing up the lines you pointed out.

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