Alone

one more night in the quiet,

in solitude,

alone.

one more night in the light of a flickering flame,

in solitude,

alone.

one more night sitting at the table in the kitchen,

in solitude,

alone.

one more night of memories,

in the dark, at the table in the quiet kitchen, illuminated by the flickering flame.

-k.s.

Author's Note

Caught the fever of poem writing a while back. I didn't know if I liked it, but it's a little different that what I used to write, and what I've been writing, so why not. Hope y'all enjoy it.

Reviews

[Ranger Nadaly]

The poem is good. I think the fourth line is beautifully written.
But the ending is a bit confusing and doesn't end the poem well. The repetition and memory thing doesn't quite get me. I think you should have an ending that grasps how the narrator feels head on. Or just something else.

[K.]

Agh, I'm just now seeing this, I'm sorry!
Now that you say that, and me rereading it, I get what you're saying! I appreciate you pointing that out! I'll work on some revisions. Thank you for reading and reviewing!

[Adam Adams]

I figured out, most of your writes're written across emotion brought by some heartaches. You seem to be the lonely spirit who craves to have true love even breathing in midst of wicked one. Your poetry displays the crystals of your heartbeats & disperses the fragrances of your colden breath in the skies... which I find very alluring to be read.. in words. Very heartfelt poetry you've come up with!

[K.]

Yes, they are. I wish they weren't but here you are reading a teenage girl's ponderings, what else could you get! Your thoughts are written so well, I'm jealous! Hopefully my stuff won't get too boring after a while. Thank you for reading and leaving such kind reviews on my work, I really appreciate it!

[Adam Adams]

Beautiful gals look more gorgeous even when they're jealous. Have at it. (Winks)

[ayosonolowo]

Nice written palx,
i really like it
thats great
keep it up!

[K.]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

[ayosonolowo]

You're welcome

[Skye Sparks]

I like this; it has a lot of imagery and any possible difference from your other poems is a good difference! I really like all of your writing!

[K.]

Thanks, Skye! I appreciate your comments and you checking out my writing!

[Craig2591]

What I like about it is that it could either be a sad poem or a quiet, peaceful poem. What you described actually sounds pleasant to me. Someone else might find it cold and lonely.

[K.]

Thanks Craig and I know exactly what you're talking about! I keep going in between whether its nice or lonely! Thanks for you input.

[Rafia ~ Yellow Girl]

The flickering light,
the silent night,
the person alone,
surrounded by the memories,
I can see them all in imagination!
All due to the slow and rhythmic pace of your poem... Good Job! :)

[K.]

Thank you so much Rafia! That's exactly what I go for!! Thanks for reading and commenting :)

[Parrish Arquette]

The mood of the poem is excellent, it's nice to see someone around my age stepping out of their comfort zone as well :)

[K.]

thank you so much!

[Melanie Genevieve]

this poem is forever alone :( i wonder what the person is doing by the flame, writing? Does the flame represent hope? id hate to come home to an empty kitchen table every night.

[K.]

hahah thank you?

[Wolfwind]

This is a wonderful poem. It really captures a solemn and calm moment, and does so beautifully. The vision of one sitting by candle light, their face and their paper and pen, aglow just ever so warmly by it's flame.

Great Ink!
Aaron

[K.]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate your comments!

[stone_eater]

funny, i sometimes do this myself