Darkness Or Light

Random poem I came up with

Eyes of crimson 

Wings of white 

Am I made of darkness or light?

Skies of blue

Bed of fire

What do I truely desire?

Does choas really stem and bloom 

From the same flower as order

Or do they come from different buds?

I know its wrong that I enjoy blood

But tell me is it truely a beautiful red

Or is it all in my head?

Sometimes I feel like I've lost touch

I've gone bonkers or mad

But is that truely bad?

Maybe there is still some good in me

I have love and compassion

Would you really abandon me in such a cold fashion?

Maybe I too stem from a wonderous and confusing flower

Something of both chaos and order

Or maybe I'm just carefully waiting to tip the boarder

The world may never know 

Where I truely lay my sword 

But in time we'll see....after the war

Reviews

[Tardisbaby]

I enjoy the poem, though there is one spelling error (chaos not choas). I like the diction you used, as well as the metaphors. Though I think it might be more powerful if you changed up the rhyme scheme at sometime in the poem. But thats just my opinion. All and all though, I think it is magnificent!

[Tunder]

Interesting thought, it really makes one think. For one, I like the contrast of chaos being a bloom, as flowers are not chaotic. There's a lot of good metaphors in here. I like the thought of blood being something beautiful. Isn't it? It does give us life after all, but bleeding out where we can see it, it does not. The stanza, "Sometimes I feel like I've lost touch
I've gone bonkers or mad
But is that truely bad?" gives the poem a very alice in wonderland type feel, which is a good thing, I think.
I also like this poem because it shows that people are not entirely good, nor are they entirely evil (or in this case dark or light) A very dr. jekyll and mr. Hyde idea, if you will, though done in verse instead.
Overall, excellent piece :) ~Tunder~ 100/100