Empty Rooms

2000

 

Why do I feel the need to hide from you?

You are supposed to be my friend and I trusted you.

So why am I hiding?

I’m right here and you're right there,

But you don’t see me.

You cant.

I’m hiding.

 

Hiding from the eyes that bore into my soul.

The hands that want to dig into my deep dark corners

And bring it all into the light.

I don’t want that.

It's dark there for a reason.

Those corners are dangerous,

Scary.

No one else knows what’s going on in those rooms,

Only me.

Why do you wander from room to room?

Taking what you want and leaving the doors open.

If you don’t stop others will follow.

I'll get hurt.

I wont be me anymore.

I'll be empty.

Empty until others come and put things in those rooms.

Leaving traces of them behind,

On their journey through my soul.

You wont recognize me anymore

And I wont have to hide.

I wont have anything to hide.

None of it will be mine.

It will be yours,

And yours,

And his

And hers.

Reviews

[Mark D. Chevalier]

Nice visual imagery. I particularly like the line: "Empty until others come and put things in those rooms. Leaving traces of them behind, On their journey through my soul."
For this piece evokes something of a wrong done to both parties. A crossing of lines that makes neither element right or wrong. My grandfather used to say, "It is what it is, and changes nothing."
This poem felt apropos.
M

[Rei]

wow powerful look into the deep sadness people have when they feel betrayed and are scared to open up to others afraid to be hurt again, at least thats how I take it. Beautiful.

[Forest Green]

A place of many rooms, plenty of places to hide and much that is unknown...

Your poem is unique and intriguing...

Nice work...!

Daniel

[Angel's Lady]

If you don't stop others will follow.
I'll get hurt

Very poignant lines. Fingerpainted/traced over in delicate shades/tones of sadness. The emptiness feels so cold to me and causes a shiver to run along my arms...

Good write, though.

[angelina neves]

fascinant! i'm still thinking and trying to get all there is in each image that comes to my mind... and sometimes i think i have it all and then comes another question to my mind and i have to reed it again... and feel as if i just gether some incomplete notions of what i should have!

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

You express your feelings so well, we all have the Dark deep corners we afried to touch,,, Yos

[Janice Ann]

WHEW...that was pretty deep. It is unique and different, but I have felt this way before, probably not as this deep as this piece describes...wonderfully unique piece.

Janiceann