dont want you to leave

I don't want you to leave,

so please don't go,

I want to stay in your warm arm's,

and never to let me go,

   so please don't go,

If you leave now I don't know what I'd do,

because your everything I have,

and the only person I talk to,

   so please don't go,

I love you,

so much that if you go I'll fall apart,

I really want you to stay,

  so please don't go.

Reviews

[C. Rose]

Third Line: arm's should be arms because there are multiple arms and nothing belongs to the arms
Fourth Line: and never to let me go implies the subject is still I from the beginning of the sentence "I want never to let me go" is not what - I think - you meant.
Seventh Line: your everything should be you're everything or you are everything

Consider periods throughout.

It is moving.

[yuki]

thank you and ill take you advice to make things better thank you.

[Dream°]

I love it, keep up the good work.

[yuki]

thank you ~! I will

[dw817]

This was well-written, Yuki !
Reading this reminds me of the music,
http://bit.ly/1goez5k

[yuki]

hehe thanks ! im glad you like it and i never heard that song before

[dw817]

Yep, what you have here is completely original, just tugs on the heart strings. :)

[yuki]

hehe thank you I try my best to do good :)