love is like wine

love is like wine

A Poem by yuki

love is like wine,

one sip and its running through your vains at a single time,

the blood rush run,

its something thats easily done,

but when you drink a bunch you get love drunk,

some same being love drunk is worse then rump,

love drunk is one of a kind as some may know,

that when that person come to your rescue and so and so,

but having that wine and great heart pound,

it makes you so speakless you can make a sound.

© 2014 yuki


Author's Note

yuki
an inspiration by my mom made m write this. hope you like it :) and please do review :D

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"but when you drink a bunch you get love drunk,
some same being love drunk is worse then rump,"
Suggestion-> "but when you drink too much you get love drunk,
some same being love drunk is worse than rump,"
~*~
"that when that person come to your rescue and so and so,"
Suggestion-> "that when that person comes to your rescue and so and so,"
~*~
"it makes you so speakless you can make a sound."
Suggestion-> "it makes you so speechless you can't make a sound."
~*~
Anywho, I like the comparison between love and wine, they ARE very similar.
Well played. ^^

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you bluefire :) and Ill edit it thank you :)
Bluefire

9 Years Ago

You're welcome. ^^



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"but when you drink a bunch you get love drunk,
some same being love drunk is worse then rump,"
Suggestion-> "but when you drink too much you get love drunk,
some same being love drunk is worse than rump,"
~*~
"that when that person come to your rescue and so and so,"
Suggestion-> "that when that person comes to your rescue and so and so,"
~*~
"it makes you so speakless you can make a sound."
Suggestion-> "it makes you so speechless you can't make a sound."
~*~
Anywho, I like the comparison between love and wine, they ARE very similar.
Well played. ^^

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you bluefire :) and Ill edit it thank you :)
Bluefire

9 Years Ago

You're welcome. ^^
I could relate to this poem in a much different way than you intended...throughly enjoyed the way you wrote this poem, that it give readers more than one view...

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you kindly :)
I can most certainly feel the raw emotion here..very nice write

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you :)
I believe wine is more kinder than love. Love tattoos your heart. Wine give you a bad headache. I like the poem. Love and wine can fall into the same place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you for the review :)
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
I really like this poem it has an easy flow and a beautiful meaning. You are very insightful for how young you are. Great write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you :) and yea people think im too young to write this but its a passion of mine :)
Jessica Lynn Polley

9 Years Ago

Oh no please I would never say you are to young to feel the way you do so please do not think that i.. read more
yuki

9 Years Ago

I know what you meant its ok haha :) thank you your very talented too :) and thank you though its no.. read more
Love is like wine. And just because it is expensive doesn't make it good, or delicious. Pretty labels do s**t for the taste

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

exactly :) thanks for the review
I liked this poem it has that gentle feel that can warm hearts. it's flow was absolutely perfect Great work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you :)
This is a cute poem, I love the movement and flow of the piece, and the relation between wine and love.

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

of course im reading a piece right now :)
Rachel P

9 Years Ago

Wonderful thank you so much!
yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you and my pleasure :)
nice writing girl. good one yuki !

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you so much lioness :)
its nice...good work dear... :))

Posted 9 Years Ago


yuki

9 Years Ago

thank you anne :)

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