In The Forest

pain gives birth to beauty

Deep within the hidden forest
It seems there's naught but endless rain
A perpetual gloom that blankets the trees
A sky that weeps and groans in pain

Deep within the hidden forest
It seems all hope is rinsed away
All cries for help drowned out by thunder
And nothing good desires to stay

But don't give up; its not the end
The sun breaks through every once in a while
And in that moment the forest glows
Lush greens blow gently in the calming wind
Flowers bloom in the brightest hues
As a rainbow settles overhead

Why can't I be like the forest?
I want my pain to make me grow
To display my beauty instead of heartache
I want the best of me to show

Why can't I be like the forest?
And while the rain pounds over me
I'll take it in and I will flourish
So when the sun breaks, I will be

Author's Note

Inspired by my spiritual mom... A simple comment said as a word of encouragement. Thank you.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Very well done. The vivid description in this is absolutely beautiful. You can feel the nature growing around you as you read this poem. So hopeful and encouraging, really gives life to nature rather than depicting nature as tattered and weak. Although, I do have to say that in the last two stanzas. It's all a matter of choice because humans can be like the forest, pain can make us grow and make us more beautiful because we'll be more self-confident (and confidence is sexy ;P). A really inspired way of expressing these emotions. Well done.

[Chris Lotus]

Very good! I especially love the last two stanzas. They show a willing and excellent expression of higher thinking and a encouraging attitude. In a way they sum up most of what was expressed beforehand, which makes them very good closing stanzas.

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"Deep within the hidden forest
It seems all hope is rinsed away
All cries for help drowned out by thunder
And nothing good desires to stay"

{wow--a gorgeous imagistic verse}

"Why can't I be like the forest?
I want my pain to make me grow
To display my beauty instead of heartache
I want the best of me to show"

{love the metaphor}

...great poetry!!!

james:-)

[Jessica Mai]

so so beautiful. Actually breath taking. The analogy of the forest is just genius. And so wonderfully written. Your descriptions create such vivid and amazing imagery. I love this!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a strong poem and it was a good. I really thought it was emotional. Well thanks for sharing. :)

[Ashley Black]

amazing work very very well written good word choice and flow with a great and inspiring message nicely done

[Chantel]

Whoa. This is awesome. I love the last two stanzas especially. Wonderful imagery as well...I love the forest and I love how you used it in this poem. Amazing :)

[Inci]

great poem !the use of words is good and it's truly encouraging

[Crowley]

I am smelling the dampness of the forest now as the suns rays break through briefly making a perfect mix of sensory experiences. This was a very visual poem for me, and I am not a visual person. I loved it.

[Haifa]

Great poem. sun, rain, flowers bloom, rainbow .. the words you used were so soft and nice. Well done