Forever haunted

Just a poem about a friend of mine i used to free run with... i nearly lost hiim forever, and i used to remember when ever i went runnning everything me and him had been thru

Sitting on the edge of a roof

watching the rain pour all around me

feeling the icy breeze telling me to go inside

 

but i will not move

i just stare out over the many rooftops

catching the fading memories of what we used to have

 

i feel the gentle warmth of anger flowing over me

the anger i felt when you turned away

time has not erased you completely, i would not allow it

 

and as i stare foolishly over these roofs

imagining that you are next to me

i kno that i will never let time take you from me

 

A bird calls softly in the distance

shocking me from my daze

and you fade like a hologram

 

i close my mind to these thoughts

and i stand, and stare over the edge of the roof

and then i am running

 

bounding from one roof to another

leaving your memories behind

i know they will catch up with me but for now i am safe

 

i glance back, a minor error

loosing track of the real world

each step now beyond my control

 

i stop as if frozen once again

your voice in my mind

i cant block out these thoughts

 

i fight my brain

and i keep on running

but it seems these dreams are forever upon me

 

the wind blows

but i have become numb to its icy blast

lost inside the trap of my mind

 

feels almost like im running in circles

never to be rid of you

your now a part of my mind

 

deep inside my head

a cocktail of thoughts i cannot loose

but i keep running

 

you will be with me forever

another phantom stitched inside my brain

one more memory i will not let time take

 

i will not forget what we had

you will always be with me

the pain i can take, loosing you i will never get over

 

so i am running over these roofs

running from the only enemy i cannot defeat

running from myself, running from the pain inside

 

 

Author's Note

I cannot wait for reviews

Reviews

[Akina]

waow, I'm so sorry for you...
but the writing is really, really good. It's so deep and it's pure emotions and I cant describes it with words.
the poem is so sad to read, and it just screams the pain your going through now, but at the same time it's so wonderful.
you will get over him. I'm sure.
hope you'll be fine :)

Akina

[Twilight]

I am surprised that only two people have reviewed this, so far! It is insiggtful, candid and filled with the detail of the writer's real-life experiences with a friend!

Few weaknesses, although the rhyme scheme and flow do not seem particularly special? What do the rest of you think?

The final line made me pause for thought, "running from myself, running from the pain inside". The writer has used the present tense, suggesting that both the pain and her running are ongoing. I really hope, that both of these issues are eventually resolved. Keep hoping for that special day, Cappi!

[Darcy]

it's amazing what a person can go through and still remain intact, from your poem i can tell that you are a true survivor, great poem, loved it