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Bursting The Bubble

Bursting The Bubble

A Poem by Christine Anne Shaw
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Sky gazing...

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I this, I that, my poems chat
of loved ones, friends and matters which
I can't allow my pen to ditch.

Yet in these times I've come to see
and recently far more than I
had realised in months before,
that peace is like an apple pie.

A pie that's baked with love and care
and there it waits upon a plate
where vultures hover, filled with hate
to desecrate the good in it.

I woke this morning, sleep filled eyes
alighted on a heart shaped cloud
so white, so bright, so full of hope
and drifting in a sky of blue.

But moments later came a plane
and like a piercing dart it struck,
an arrow trail of vapour left
which shattered all the perfect shape
and tore this lovely heart apart.

My cloud its bubble truly cursed,
the brains of it were torn apart
and what remains, the pain conveyed
within this troubled piece of verse.

© 2018 Christine Anne Shaw



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There's an old scripture which reads, "They have healed the hurt of the daughter of my people by saying, "Peace, peace", when there is no peace." And I suppose we shall always have hatred, wars, arguments and intolerance mingled with vanity, oppression, prejudice and fear. They can burst our bubble of safety and serenity more often than not. Sometimes we just have to believe in the dawn to get us through the night or hope for a rainbow after the storm. I enjoyed the read, my friend; eloquently expressed. Bless.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Thank you Fabian. Your words very much appreciated.

Chris



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We can write a poem about anything, can't we?
And we can project an inner disturbance on just about any outer event.
Profoundly creative, Chris!

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Christine Anne Shaw

2 Months Ago

Good morning from a very sunny UK. Probably either very, very early or very late for you Jimmy. Than.. read more
This is so creative & powerful! I also write mostly fun or funny stuff, but I’m always aware that I’m hiding behind such shallow mirth, hiding from the many tragedies too plentiful to respond to adequately these days. It’s so imaginative the way you describe the heart-shaped cloud & the plane piercing it. That’s one of the most imaginative & vivid metaphors I’ve ever read. Your poem perfectly describes my constant battle with trying to write upbeat material in a downtrodden world (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

2 Months Ago

Hello Margie, so pleased that you could relate my words to your battle for upbeat material. That mea.. read more
A peace- pie and a sadly burst cloud/bubble are great metaphors for the ups and downs of life Chris. Your skyward musing is eloquent, contemplative, thought provoking, wistful. Lovely form, flow, cadence, rhyme. Man creates and man destroys, sometimes indiscriminately. I feel your sadness and share it. Wishing you sunshine and no torn clouds today my friend. Superb writing.

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Sunshine all the way today Annette. Beautiful weather and sky high spirits. Thank you for your lovel.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

3 Months Ago

Yay! You are most welcome Chris.:))
Pictures so strikingly real to this reader. I can relate. Thank you for sharing.

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Thank you kitty. pleased you can relate.

Chris
but why Bursting the bubble? i still can't get it(

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Using a metaphor as a title.
Yeah, I like it very much) Nice)

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Thank you.
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Such sharp piercing imagery, Christine, and words that convey a darkness. As I finished reading this poem, I thought about how nature's beings, and those created by man, often encroach in our world. And, that trail of ice crystals through the perfect heart exemplifies how we (humans) can disrupt the natural beauty and peace. Nice work!

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Thank you Robert for your comments, much appreciated.

Chris
For the short time you've been here, you're diversifying your style with such a clever hand. I'm so happy for you, Chris, and wish you the best!

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Thank you Kelly. Lots more to come yet. Old and new stuff. I was in a rut with poetry and had stoppe.. read more
The vultures aren't truly desecrating your apple pie, they are just enjoying it in a different way from an entirely different point of view.

One person's desecration is another's sanctification and I don't think you can truly have one without at least a little bit of the other.

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Your viewpoint appreciated. Thanks
clever piece of writing...the rhymes, the fluid lines singing of hope shattered...of how there are always those who circle us waiting to scavenge on our dead hopes and dreams...feasting on the broken hearts.
j.

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Thank you Jacob.

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