Hurricane

(our Beth's bedroom, was frequently like this when she was about 8, much improved these days, though)

If by chance

you care to glance

and peep in Beth's room while she sleeps,

a hurricane has swept a path

and littered debris piles up deep.

All her garments

rumpled, crumpled,

thrown upon a ransacked bed.

Wardrobe doors swing free from hinges,

loosened

when composure fled.

Empty shelving,

cleared of stories,

dumped upon the dark wood floor.

All her soft toys in the corner,

from her school bag papers pour.

Half-mast curtains, lamp shades tilted

broken beads which look like mine.

See my long forgotten lipstick, found

inside her pink walled shrine.

Boots and shoes, how many are there?

East and west the pairs are tossed.

All goods classified as missing

re-appear,

they've not been lost.

In the morning, hear a whistle,

watch the red card handed out.

She'll be clearing up this chaos,

on her face,

no doubt a pout.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Ah, teenage bedrooms. If there is ever a walking dead, zombie apocalypse scenario, the contagion will surely come from a teenagers bedroom. Probably a male, whose sock basket will evolve the new bacterial superpower that will wipe us out.
ps....Can you tell I'm a little bitter? Shared a bedroom with my brother. I renamed him the thing :)

[Chris Shaw]

Wow Lorry, the new bacterial superpower coming from teenage bedrooms? I can't disagree with that, some of the stuff I've found over the years. Sounds like you were the tidy one, and your brother created havoc:)) I shared a bedroom with my younger sister, I was messy she was spotless. Fast forward a few years and the situation completely reversed, and has stayed that way since!

Chris

[Lorry]

He called me OCD :)

[Chris Shaw]

You touched a raw nerve calling him a thing!! lol. Getting his own back.

[Neville]

Tell me about it why dont'cha .. I'm so glad my own fell in love, moved out & got married .. am still sifting through much of the debris she has left behind ..

[Chris Shaw]

She has a new boyfriend who tidies up her chaos. She is still very much with us. Needless to say Will is very much in Nan’s good books and I hope he stays in Beth’s good books too for a very long time. Yes debris eh ….and loads of it :)Thanks Neville. Pleased your daughter is happily hitched.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

A stark and believable depiction.
While a bit upsetting to my parental instincts, highly entertaining.
Radiates charm!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jimmy. Pleased to say, things have improved!

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand these words. Four children and now three grandchildren. Nice description led to the proper ending. Thank you Christine for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. That's quite a nice little brood you have there. They must bring you much happiness.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

They do Chris and you are welcome.

[grimfukle]

I can sooo relate!
I raised 2 girls, each with their own room and they shared their own bathroom
Talk about a war zone.
Every parent to be should read this.
Excellent job!

[Chris Shaw]

It's always the girls that create a war zone. Boys are untidy, but nothing compared to the girlies. Thank you grimfukle. What a strange name you have (lol)

[grimfukle]

Yeah, think of a malevolent ogre with a nasty sense of humor.
Kevin, my real name, just seems too innocent.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Kevin, far too innocent! I would have thought you a Tarquin or Ebeneezer. Happy to meet you on these pages though.

[grimfukle]

Likewise Chris!
Adieu for now.

[Chris Shaw]

Bye for now :))

[Vivian Gospel]

Sounds like beth is a fun girl. Fun poem as well

[Chris Shaw]

She's a lovely girl, full of fun, but just a wee bit untidy!!! Thank you so much. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Vivian Gospel]

Arent we all guilty of that?

[Chris Shaw]

A wee bit untidy now. Vast improvement on the state of play back when that poem was written :))

[Vivian Gospel]

Well you shamed her into it i gotta say. Jk.

[Chris Shaw]

Gentle persuasion. Dangling a carrot always helps:))

[Vivian Gospel]

It sure does. Was the carrot equivalent to 10 carats?

[Chris Shaw]

Nope. Could have been do you want your pocket money? If you do, you know what you've got to do :))

[Rye]

Very creative but yet cute write, I enjoyed your last stanza a lot.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Miss Mee. Pleased to see you on my page.

Chris

[Kelly Scheppers]

It seems "hurricanes" of THIS magnitude are as prevalent here in the states, as well! Lol, if this is a sign of intelligence, I must be on the verge of stupid. ; )

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Kelly, it's got to be a universal theme hasn't it? I'm a tidy person too, so I must be on the verge of stupid too lol. Thank you and hope all is good with you.

Chris

[sette]

as someone once told me a cluttered room signifies high intelligence because of too many things going on inside one's mind there is the outlet which is the clutter.... perhaps it is true

[Chris Shaw]

That's a very interesting response sette, which I have shared with Neville, because this poem reminds him of his daughter. Never looked on it like that before. Thank you so much for your response.

Chris