Confetti Kisses

Confetti Kisses

A Poem by Chris Shaw
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Sweet jasmine, how love let me down,
confetti kisses in my hair.
A trail of sorrow, web of lies,
a hopeless castle in the air.

Beneath your bending branches I
walk carefree on a breezy day
recalling how I wed too young
and in the merry month of May.

But merry didn't persevere,
as melting moments faded fast.
My heart, my hopes, my dreams for us,
a silent graveyard in the past.

And all that loving went to waste,
with promises that were not kept.
The wretched heartache, sleepless nights,
a lake from all the tears I wept.

From time to time our paths still cross,
though years have eased that bitter pain.
I see him through a stranger's eyes
yet treachery has left its stain.

© 2018 Chris Shaw


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Sometimes when you get married young as people grow and change a rift between two people happens instead of growing together over time.

This poem conveys the emotional toll it takes on a person when the hopes and dreams are shattered with the loss of not only love but a partner and lover.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

My parents married very young and had a hugely successful marriage. Sadly if you marry someone who t.. read more
Poetic Beauty

2 Years Ago

You are welcome. When one person is selfish it never ends well.



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Great poem, Chris. Getting married young can be like walking across a rickety bridge with slats missing. There are never any guarantees when those rings are exchanged. It's a cross your fingers deal in the long run.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thank you Tim. Burned fingers. A long time ago. I am healed and it made a poem :) Appreciate your lo.. read more
a terrible let down; maybe a young marriage gone astray....pain and sorrow take over like the plague; the loss is much to bare; your words so deftly express this sorrow, the images of great disappointment come alive...even with years passed the stain is always there...it lingers...
Excellent poem, sad, but a slice of life nevertheless.
Best,
B.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Many thanks Betty for calling on this old poem. I appreciate your thoughts. Sad at the time, but all.. read more
relationships can certainly sour especially when marrying too young.
Sounds as tho' you have made a successful change which is a very good thing.
My youngest had his first marriage fall apart with children being involved which has finally all settled down into a workable situation

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

When children are involved it can be devastating. Long time ago and second time round it has been a .. read more
It is odd to meet someone you loved and cared for. And your life ran into different directions.
"From time to time our paths still cross,
though years have eased that bitter pain.
I see him through a stranger's eyes
yet treachery has left its stain."
The above lines are true for some. Dear Chris, like a Leonard Cohen song. "I open the chest-door and a thousand fingers escape into the air. I wonder who they were, belonged to?" Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Dear Coyote, thank you for your thoughtful review. Knocked out my poem reminded you of a Cohen son.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

The song "fingerprints" by Cohen. You would like. he had the vision. The poet of song is missed. You.. read more
Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thank you. I will look it up. Yes, the great man is missed by his many fans.
The intro to this poem is amazing and I truly believe this is one of your best pieces, but I've said that plenty of times! You keep topping yourself. The mix of imagery of confetti with 'how love let me down', is absolutely perfect and replicates the feeling of having to clean up after a party, with works perfectly well with love ending. Honestly. the line 'promises that were not kept' made me tear up a bit. You wrote such an intensely hurtful and bitter piece here, still with that piece of everlasting loving working, its way through to the surface. Love can take such a huge toll on us when it doesn't work out and change the course of our life forever, and I think you captured that perfectly here. Thank you so, so much for sharing. (:

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thank you for that fabulous review Colacat. You review so well. Really appreciate you checking in. B.. read more
Sweet jasmine,, how love let me down,
confetti kisses in my hair.

Beautiful lead in
let's us know this
Is a poignant piece

I love the entire poem
albeit so sad, love is
like that. it can fade
so fast or last a lifetime
the rhyme and cadence is
spot on..i like the way you
wrote this one..

nice work Chris


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Dear Fran Marie, pleased you enjoyed the read. Many thanks for your lovely review. You are appreciat.. read more
  Fran Marie

2 Years Ago

you're so very
welcome;
To have lived so many years… and yet remember those days as tears… when dreams were clouds that float away like shadows when storm clouds pray. Or perhaps it is a Shadow of an Angels Wing watching over you. tenderly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Dear Pat, the orange blossom petals each June briefly remind me, but it was a long time ago and it d.. read more
Patricia Wedel

2 Years Ago

Thanks Chris… I need to write a poem, but I can only rhyme in a review at the present time. Your .. read more
Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thank you my friend. Your poems will come back to you soon. In fact I caught a glimpse on the forum .. read more
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Expectations, shattered dreams and heartache... So painful to even think. Two partners bonds over some dream like expectations, but if time and situation plays the spoil sport, then it is shattering and more so because it is coming from a person you were emotionally dependent with. A very painful write...even though so very well penned

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Quite an old write Sima so completely healed after many years, but pleased at least I got a poem out.. read more
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2 Years Ago

Nice to hear it's an old poem and no scars left.... Much love and hugs
Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Reciprocated hug and loves dear Sima. Have a lovely day :)
Sometimes when you get married young as people grow and change a rift between two people happens instead of growing together over time.

This poem conveys the emotional toll it takes on a person when the hopes and dreams are shattered with the loss of not only love but a partner and lover.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

My parents married very young and had a hugely successful marriage. Sadly if you marry someone who t.. read more
Poetic Beauty

2 Years Ago

You are welcome. When one person is selfish it never ends well.

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Berkshire, United Kingdom



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