Melt Down

Cinquain one sentence, five lines 2/4/6/8/2 syllables with imagery

Slow thaw
for ice needles,
as sun glare gleams brightly
illuminating clear crystal's
swan song.

Reviews

[Lorry]

This is beautiful Chris and in my head, the Cranberries song the icicle melts played along to your stunning image, that to me is reminiscent of the cycle of life and rebirth, as well as a moment that is timeless in the greater scheme of things, yet you can't drag your eyes away from its beauty.
A perfect example of how 22 syllables can conjure a thousand in the readers mind.

Ps...stil not here until the festive apocalypse is over, so if santa asks, you ain't seen me :)

[Chris Shaw]

Lorry, I was so pleased I tempted you out of your self imposed anti Santa break. Your review was lovely. I will have to remind myself of the Cranberries song. Now go and hide. I hear sleigh bells.

Chris

[Lorry]

I'm not worried, i've put spikes inthe fireplace, so ig he does try to break and enter, santa will get kebab'd.
I have seen some worrying signs of christmas poems appearing on her though, so i'm going to hide under my bed until boxing day :)

[Chris Shaw]

That sounds awfully painful Lorry. No Christmas poem from me until at least three days before Christmas.

Chris

[Neville]

................. perfectly executed ..

[Chris Shaw]

A cinquain, a piece of structured poetry attempted sometime ago. Pleased, the imagery worked for you. Thank you kindly Neville. Have s good Monday.

Chris

[Neville]

it did .. thank you and back @ ya .. Neville

[Pete]

can just see those icicles melting in the warm sun - drip, drip, drip. great stuff Chris ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Pete for your welcome response. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

You said everything needed in the poem. Made the reader see and believe your words. Thank you dear Chris for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote for your visit. Always good to see you.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome dear Chris.

[Onlyme]

Mm, this is truly heavenly Chris, such a glow and comfort from this neat and alluring short Cinquain.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Dawn for your lovely review.

Chris

[Onlyme]

No thank you Chris. :)

[Onlyme]

for the wonderful, Cinquain.

[Stella Armour]

i felt a real wintery chill as i read this Chris, it took me back to when we had bright, freezing mornings with icicles dripping from overnight frost.
A rare sight now but a lovely image you gave me of the early sun illuminating the crystal clear drops of ice.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Stella. I don't see them very often, but when I do it is such a treat, you don't forget how incredibly beautiful they can be.

Chris

[moog-drika]

It feels like a warm winter while reading this. Wish we could give life to such words for letting these beautiful creatures live peacefully.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you mmog driks. Good to see you.

Chris

[goldenscar__]

This poem is so comforting, Chris. Thank you

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your review golden car...

Chris

[john l smith]

nicely done
Lots of finger counting

[Chris Shaw]

Yes ice fingers and glorious they are too. Thank you Dave. All good wishes.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Not sure if I can ever get it right the way you and Gee have, in terms of cinquains, but it is lovely and inspiring to read. Love the imagery here. Brevity definitely speaks :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dr Y. Yes these are all about imagery. Happy you enjoyed. Your visut, appreciated.

Chris

Chris

[andrew mitchell]

I can only dream of these images of icicles hanging down which I suppose make the images more romantic as we don't have such weather patterns at Christmas.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Andrew, they are incredibly beautiful, as is snow, but the cold weather is not as pleasant as being able to spend time in the sun on a nice beach:) We get what we get and have to deal with it. Many thank yous for your visit.

Chris