Dethroned

Dethroned

A Poem by Christine Anne Shaw
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(country or sea, or maybe both)

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Beside the margins of the bay,
the lazy waves creep in to shore.
Yet those who stayed all day to build
have left their castles knowing they
won't see their splendour anymore.

Their towers stand in twilight sand,
await their turn to disappear,
as lap, lap, lap the gentle calm
of graceful fingers capped with lace
are skirting, skirting ever near.

This Ocean beckons me to stray,
dethroned the thoughts of country green.
Salt water gleams displayed for me,
as sequins stitched on fluid black
lend vistas set in lunar sheen.

© 2019 Christine Anne Shaw


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Indeed so descriptive of dusk at the seaside (thats ocean to our brothers and sisters across the pond!). A lovely time and I even recall the disappointment as a child when one had take so much trouble to build the sandcastle to see it begin to erode and collapse. Nice flowing rhyming poem.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Good afternoon John. Oh, the upset as a kid of having to leave your castle to the incoming tide:) Th.. read more



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Tis a tough choice... It seems we share the love of the ocean and the countryside and you have both captured and conveyed that feeling here so well...

Neville

Posted 1 Week Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Thank you Neville, it is a tough choice, but there is no need to choose when you can enjoy both.
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To leave a world so familiar and drift away with the ocean wind. Castles in the sand, castles on land... all temporary, the ocean comes calling via your words so inviting. Great imagery Ann, makes me just want to write about the sea now. 100/100!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for visiting these lines of mine Kee. It is wonderful to see you on my page again... read more
such imagery! another gorgeous piece

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

You are spoiling me today and I thank you so much Ruselnex for another visit.

Chris
RuseInex

3 Weeks Ago

yes, i guess i am, it's just that i got caught up in your style and subject matter, wow, i read you .. read more
Reminds me of beach day sun, laughter and fun,
the sea always stole my sandcastles from me,
and I returned
day after day
all Summer long,

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Pleased this little write brought back some happy for you. Thanks gram for your visit.

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This poem has been masterfully executed! It has great cadence, rhythm and flow and good rhyme structure and overall stanza layout.
It's filled with knowledge and wisdom.

Well done!!!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Happy BlackPrince that you enjoyed these lines. Many thanks for reading.

Chris
I so enjoy walking along the shoreline as the sun goes down and the sandcastles of the day disappear into the ocean. Your imagery here is superb, Chris. There is a magical feel to watching the ocean as the sun sets. You captured that with your words. Almost a melancholy feel. Wonderful. Lydi**

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Hello Lydi**. I share your love for beach walking at sunset or even sunrise. A great way to either s.. read more
This brings back childhood memories. Ocean trips were few, so they are great memories. I love your description of the scene.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Dear Jon, how lovely to see a review from you. Hope all is good with you. Many thanks for your visit.. read more
Nature claims its own. And, even when the ocean reclaims the sand, we learn to build again. Time on the beach tells us something about life and death. A beautiful scene here that transports the reader.

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Your thoughts are welcome and appreciated. Tha k you so much for your visit.

Chris
Salt water gleams displayed for me,
as sequins stitched on fluid black
lend vistas set in lunar sheen.. boom boom boom rhyming queen!
One day this bunny is gonna sell all of his property and move to the ocean, nothing calls me stronger than the seaside... to my marrow.
I will of course not build my castle to close to the shore but perhaps my construct will be fluid.
This poem speaks to me deeply dear Chris thanks:)


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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Dear Bunny it delights me that this poem has a special meaning for you. Many thanks for your welcome.. read more
It makes me long to be a turtle so that I may have land and sea both.

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Christine Anne Shaw

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you Starfish. Land and Sea for you then. That's how I feel also. Many thanks for your visit.read more

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Christine Anne Shaw

Berkshire, United Kingdom



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