Dethroned

Dethroned

A Poem by Chris Shaw
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(country or sea, or maybe both)

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Beside the margins of the bay,
the lazy waves creep in to shore.
Yet those who stayed all day to build
have left their castles knowing they
won't see their splendour anymore.

Their towers stand in twilight sand,
await their turn to disappear,
as lap, lap, lap the gentle calm
of graceful fingers capped with lace
are skirting, skirting ever near.

This Ocean beckons me to stray,
dethroned the thoughts of country green.
Salt water gleams displayed for me,
as sequins stitched on fluid black
lend vistas set in lunar sheen.

© 2019 Chris Shaw


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Indeed so descriptive of dusk at the seaside (thats ocean to our brothers and sisters across the pond!). A lovely time and I even recall the disappointment as a child when one had take so much trouble to build the sandcastle to see it begin to erode and collapse. Nice flowing rhyming poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

Good afternoon John. Oh, the upset as a kid of having to leave your castle to the incoming tide:) Th.. read more



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Me too dear Chris.
"This Ocean beckons me to stray,
dethroned the thoughts of country green."
I need a years near the sea. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Months Ago


Chris Shaw

6 Months Ago

Thank you Coyote. Hope you are well my friend. I am looking forward to a week by the sea. I am recov.. read more


the title here gave no indication or hint as to the beauty that which followed .. indeed such a gentle step back in time and a perfect reminisce .. Neville

Posted 6 Months Ago


Chris Shaw

6 Months Ago

I thank you Neville. Nature is so healing. Whether the country or the ocean it both delights and gif.. read more
Neville

6 Months Ago


My pleasure as always and back at you Chris

Neville
An eloquent classical poem powerfully portraying the ocean's--or time's--incessant erosion.
Other analogies can, of course, be easily drawn.
This strikes me as being poetry of a high order.
Nicely done, poetess!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

3 Years Ago

Thank you Jimmy for delving into the archives and giving this oldie a much needed airing. Much appre.. read more
To leave a world so familiar and drift away with the ocean wind. Castles in the sand, castles on land... all temporary, the ocean comes calling via your words so inviting. Great imagery Ann, makes me just want to write about the sea now. 100/100!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much for visiting these lines of mine Kee. It is wonderful to see you on my page again... read more
such imagery! another gorgeous piece

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

You are spoiling me today and I thank you so much Ruselnex for another visit.

Chris
RuseInex

4 Years Ago

yes, i guess i am, it's just that i got caught up in your style and subject matter, wow, i read you .. read more
Reminds me of beach day sun, laughter and fun,
the sea always stole my sandcastles from me,
and I returned
day after day
all Summer long,

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

Pleased this little write brought back some happy for you. Thanks gram for your visit.

.. read more
This poem has been masterfully executed! It has great cadence, rhythm and flow and good rhyme structure and overall stanza layout.
It's filled with knowledge and wisdom.

Well done!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

Happy BlackPrince that you enjoyed these lines. Many thanks for reading.

Chris
I so enjoy walking along the shoreline as the sun goes down and the sandcastles of the day disappear into the ocean. Your imagery here is superb, Chris. There is a magical feel to watching the ocean as the sun sets. You captured that with your words. Almost a melancholy feel. Wonderful. Lydi**

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

Hello Lydi**. I share your love for beach walking at sunset or even sunrise. A great way to either s.. read more
This brings back childhood memories. Ocean trips were few, so they are great memories. I love your description of the scene.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

Dear Jon, how lovely to see a review from you. Hope all is good with you. Many thanks for your visit.. read more

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Chris Shaw

Berkshire, United Kingdom



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