Canvas

Life is like a canvas

Everyday is a new canvas for us to  have new ideas, experiences, and so on.

Conflict, pain, and so on is also on the canvas.

Canvas has the bad experiences, which turns into something beautiful at the end.

Taking the bad ideas on the canvas and turning them into something special at the end.

Sharing experiences from your canvas with other people helps their canvas become better because they have seen what you have been through.

The canvas also shows the hard work to get somewhere, which leads to gaining new ideas, wisdom, and so on.

It also shows the pain of going through something hard in life, whether to give up and not deal with it anymore.

It also the how surviving something really bad and coming out on top.

Everyday is a new canvas.

Reviews

[Ella]

Amazing poem. I like the idea of comparing a new day to a canvas.

[Justin]

thanks :) :) everyday is something new

[Ella]

That is true.

[Victoria Nakis]

Again, I love the general idea of the poem, the thought it beautiful, but the execution is too direct. This has the potential to be a great poem, be creative in the syntax and play with tempo. Try to create the idea of the canvas and what it does, without saying canvas so much.

[Justin]

thanks :) can u please explain to me what u were talking about :) thanks

[Victoria Nakis]

I'll try my best, but it's hard to event explain to myself. It's a general vibe I get from the poem. It seems more like your just having a monologue, verses writing a poem. Like the other poem I commented on, it's just very direct. You are telling the audience what you want them to get, what you want them to understand.
Try using metaphors and similes, really any literary technique to improve this. "Conflict, pain, and so on is also on the canvas" Not very poetic, also not very beautiful sounding. It's just very amateur, but with such a potential to be art. I'm not sure if any of that made sense.
I'm just one person, not a professional, so I could be completely wrong, this is just my opinion.

[Sydney]

i also relate people to canvases, very nice

[Justin]

thanks :) yup u can :) everyone is a blank canvas before you get to know them :)

[Peach]

I like the wonderful message you were able to depict through your unique symbolism.

[Justin]

thanks :) when we wake up in the morning, it is a blank canvas ready to colors to be put on it :)

[Hailey Mae]

I like your playing of words here. I think you executed a good point and people should be more open to let the canvas shape into what will be. Beautiful piece. A good view to embrace individuality, and a canvas is a good portrayal of that.

[Justin]

thanks hailey :) :) everyday is, no matter a good or horrible day, then the next day is a clean canvas :)

[Nobody Buyer]

This was great, I enjoyed your comparison to a new day and a canvas very much.

[Justin]

thanks :) yup everyday is a canvas :)

[eglantine]

Yes, everyday we should rise with a fresh canvas in our hearts and create something of the day in our lives. This read very essay-ish. I'd try to format it in a single paragraph--make it very prose poem.

[Justin]

thanks :) that isnt a bad idea, thanks for the tip :)

[closed]

this was kool
a fun concept that life is a painting that we continually paint and repaint

the popular notion that we are in control of our own destinys

a literary gem


-Dream

[Justin]

thanks :) :) :) life is like a paint brush and paint

[Harley Sapphire]

Love this comparison of life to a canvas! Parts of this do confuse me, and I had to reread but overall it was very good and understandable. I saw you entered it into a completion, I bet you'll do amazing!

[Justin]

thanks :) sorry to confuse u :)

[Harley Sapphire]

Haha don't be sorry, just want to put in my input in case other readers feel the same way, id want them to fully appreciate your work!

[Justin]

thanks :) we all interrupt things differently :P

[~]

Yes indeed, life is like a canvas, we are the painters, and we need to be careful in how we choose our colors otherwise the painting will be too dark.. :D

[Justin]

thanks for commenting :) :) :) i agree with you, everyone goes through dark times in life