GREAT SOUND

GREAT SOUND

A Poem by Justin
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It is about the sound of thunder

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Thunder has a great sound to it.
You know when rain is coming when you hear thunder.
It is a sound that shuts down the public pool.
It is a sound that you can hear a mile or so away.
It might come across as a negative, but it is a positive sound.
It makes all of the negative sounds of the day go away and brings   something peaceful.


© 2015 Justin



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Justin
Let me know what you think of it :) thanks

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I've always enjoyed rain and the sound of thunder and i was happy to read this poem finding that others enjoy it too. It was short and simple and very lovely.

Though, i cant quite put my finger on it, but there seems to be something... lacking. when i read the poem, i felt like it was not completed. Perhaps it's how i read it or the layout you've chosen, i honestly cannot tell you.

Still a very good piece though. well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like that you can write a good piece about something that most people wouldn't pay much attention to. Well done.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Let's call it prose, that way you don't have to worry about rhyming.

It's not very poetic. It's more like an obvious statement for a science report.

When doing poetry you have to be artistic, you have to paint a picture with words, you have to evoke the reader's imagination! You can't just state something they already know. Everyone's heard thunder, but it's your job to make them hear it differently.

Give thunder life. Give thunder a personality. Be descriptive. Be creative. The reason people like thunderstorms is because of what it creates in our heads and hearts. Make the reader feel that.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Victoria Nakis

2 Years Ago

I agree. I enjoy the overall idea of the "poem", but it was too direct. Personally, poetry is a trip.. read more
Kaiju

2 Years Ago

See? I'm not the only one.

(To the comment I'm commenting on, this guy tries to justi.. read more
I've always enjoyed rain and the sound of thunder and i was happy to read this poem finding that others enjoy it too. It was short and simple and very lovely.

Though, i cant quite put my finger on it, but there seems to be something... lacking. when i read the poem, i felt like it was not completed. Perhaps it's how i read it or the layout you've chosen, i honestly cannot tell you.

Still a very good piece though. well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's so true about storms. They offer so much peace

Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So simple yet so beautiful. Great job!

Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Justin

2 Years Ago

thanks for commenting on it :) :) i try my best too :)
Really true it brings a positive twist to something typically seen as negative

Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Justin

2 Years Ago

thanks :) :) :) :) that was what i was shooting for :)
Gabby Gellerman

2 Years Ago

I still only have one review on adduction
very fine writing...i love the sound and energy of a thunderstorm, it breeds inspiration...

Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Justin

2 Years Ago

i agree with you :) thanks :) i can just listen to it and not get bored ;)
I can't really say thundering is the thing for me, sorry. Thundering and the lightening scare me. I don't know what it is,may be because I know that tornadoes and things like that could be possible with thundering and lightening. But really at the same time, seeing the clouds darken and the thundering starts to roll, I start to get butterflies in my stomach and I start to get suspense about the weather. Like is there going to be a tornado or hail or something that would cause damage. But lately where I live there's been quite a few storms and they're doing nothing, but damaging the area, with severe flooding, so not really a big fan of them! Overall you had a great write! Keep writing!

Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Heartful5160

2 Years Ago

I wish more people were like that LOL! But everyone is different!
Justin

2 Years Ago

yea, i like being rare :P
Heartful5160

2 Years Ago

There's nothing wrong with that! God made us to be rare and to share that with the world!
thunder and lightning scare me...im that person who is hiding under the bed lol
Great write though and beautiful way to look at it, Thunder, so loud it drowns out the negative sounds of the day!! brilliant!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Justin

2 Years Ago

thanks :) :) :) I try to make something negative into something beautiful
sereenaoutloud

2 Years Ago

and you accomplished just that Justin, it is a beautiful write...well done! :)
Justin

2 Years Ago

thanks :) you sometimes have to think outside the box
I couldn't agree more

A very wise write

thanks for sharing

Posted 2 Years Ago


Justin

2 Years Ago

thanks :) :) :) your welcome :)

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