The Queen

I wrote this over a year ago at the end. Our whole relationship he had just a mattress on the floor. The day I drop off his things forever, he has a beautiful Queen sleigh bed with new mattresses. Figures.

Your bed looked so warm and inviting

like the sleigh of a Queen

and it took all i had to not lower myself on her

lest i become imprisoned by my refusal to rise again

and so we made love for the last time on the floor

next to the majestic throne you'd sleep in that night

giving ourselves a memory to leave with

and i swear she murmured her condolences

as our breath slowed

as your hold loosened

as my crown was removed 

and i knew i'd never be wrapped in her robes

that another would be crowned princess

laying on the Queen

underneath her prince.

Reviews

[Prose-full]

very nice..from beginning to end...
unique, sensual, bit of sadness, yet triumph in knowing that-if you lay in the bed....
and the release of the last passion between the two of you...

i like your style!..

[Lily1111]

This was very clever with the incorporation of the queen sleigh bed. I liked the how well the references to the queen were woven throughout. "majestic throne", "wrapped in her robes", as my crown was removed." Great imagery. You are very visual when you write. Ordinary things come alive with your words.
It made it very interesting and enjoyable to read. Really gave it depth.

My husband is a woodworker and just finished making me a long desired King size solid cherry sleigh bed that it took him 8 years to build. I already told him that God forbid we would ever divorce, the bed is mine!

So my advice is, splurge and buy yourself a King sized sleigh bed. That way, your next lover can be the one who is "dethroned" rather than you! LOL

Great poem, unique and creatively portrayed. Simply wonderful!

[Rambling Prose]

This is so very unique! You made a sleigh bed sound so seductively sensual - I wanted to climb between sheets!
The down side is losing the affections of your prince to another & being stripped of your royal crown...

Lovely, lovely, lovely...

[Antonio Valentino]

Life can be pretty complicated can't it?
Do you think he put a pea under the mattress,
to test future princess prospects?
Well the loss is all his. Hey, maybe the next
frog you meet, will turn out to be your
dream prince. Loved the poem.

Take Care - ribbit! - ooops!