Take A Deep Breath

Tomorrow you may forget me.        The tender kisses thaT

Are placed tonight on my  hungry and eager lips   will be A

Kind        memory      that I will travel to for days and bacK

Even when I have given up      hope   of hearing your voicE

 

And ask the gods to    erase from my memory     your aurA

 

Doubt is a familiar face to me,          whispering all I dreaD

Even when I fight for      hopeful truths     I want to believE

Even when he wins each hand despite my  ace   in the holE

Pain is surely to be    expected   when the joker jumps shiP

 

Being here with    you   wipes away all I know of the numB

Reality tomorrow will bring.         It is easy to pretend youR

Earthly   hands  are  familiar with me that  there are  morE

Acts of love to be made in these tangled sheets  of wisteriA

Tomorrow you may forget me.   But today,  today I will noT

Hold air in my lungs,  I will let you bring me to each breatH

....

Author's Note

This one was so hard to format properly! I had it perfectly aligned in Word, but couldn't get it to transfer over correctly. So instead I opted to make it more artsy and less than perfect. And I think I like it more this way. (P.S. I fixed the format once again. Hopefully it's correct now....)

Reviews

[Lorraine]

I see your attempting to create something with unique structure. However, I think it looks a bit messy (not too mention distracting) the way you capitalize the letters at the end of a word. Even so, I like the flow of your words, the way they seem to smoothly maneuver themselves around your theme. You have a lovely concept too.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[DanaRegen]

This is a lovely poem,
I like the layout, everything about it, and the fact that its so beautiful. Keep up the good work, and nicely done!

[Lily1111]

What an interesting format for this poem. It adds an interesting element as you read it. I can't decide if this poem is melancholy or hopeful. Being an optimist, I am going to go with hopeful! Nicely done indeed!

[Cliff Rhodes]

This is really amazing word format and I know how difficult it is to make it come out just right. Nice job, and a meaningfull expression. Thanks for sharing.

[Mistral Bilgera]

Cool!! It's creative, form-wise. and tenderly heartfelt, content-wise!!! the format is a little messed-up, but i still got the acrostic, anyway. :) i love the helpless romantic air in the poem! sooo lovely, and.... feminine.

in a way, i love this, as it brings up one of the many recurring themes in poetry:
"don't forget to enjoy the now" coz people are too busy minding tomorrow, they fail to enjoy today.

thank you for sharing this!! i love it. :)

[AK]

Very creative indeed. Very nice!
I tried to get artsy with one of my pieces once and the formatting here hosed it up too. No matter, you did a great job!

[Angel's Lady]

Pain is surely to be expected when the joker jumps shiP - Nicely done!
Acts of love to be made in these tangled sheets of wisteriA - Very visual!

(I hate to be the one to tell you this but formatting also stole your second and third lines. It has done this to me before.)
Great job, though!