A letter to Mom and Dad

I nearly died 10 years ago, it was the first time I had my mom and dad by my side. I decided to write about it.

I saw you mom, sitting by my side holding my hand.  Praying to God that he doesn’t take me away from you yet.  You gave away two full years of life with me, could this really be the death of your only son?

 

I saw you dad, waiting patiently to see if I’d awaken.  Shirt soaked in tears begging God not to steal his only child. Life is too short to lose and live without your son.  You have finally felt the love in return after not having me for many years. 

I see you mom and dad.  I watch from above while both of you sit by my bedside praying silently that this is not the end.  Holding my hands, praying that the mistake from twenty years ago doesn’t escape this world without understanding that you both love me.  

 

Twenty years of life and today I almost died.  They said there was no way I’d make it out alive but the power of prayer proved otherwise. I opened my eyes and saw my parents by my side.  I actually thought I died, gone to heaven and life on Earth no longer existed. 

 

It was just a miracle that brought my parents to my side together for the first time.  They thought I’d die; they weren’t even there together to welcome me in to life yet today they are by my side.  

 

With all that said, I love you mom and dad.  No one is perfect and I can’t blame you for your faults.  We only live in this world once and we only learn as we live and make mistakes.  I am thankful for everything and for the both of you.  Thankful for your imperfections and thankful that you have let me make my own mistakes.  Thank you mom and dad. 

Author's Note

I was bored and wanted to write... I remembered this day... let me know your thoughts :)

Reviews

[Isabel25]

This is actually autobiographical??? In the postscript you have mentioned ever so casually that you remembered this day.
An intense piece. What I love about it is you haven't done much to make it sound intense, yet your selection of words and ambiance in the story do the job for you wonderfully. Bravo Aaron

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Annie... and yes it is autobiographical. It was back when I was 20 and I wrote it the way I remember how it felt to kind of subconsciously float above my body and see my parents by my side. Thank you for your review :)

[modtoddinc]

Thank you for this heartfelt writing. I had a similar experience myself. Good job.

[AaronFreitas]

I'm glad this poem found you since you had a similar experience my friend.... thank you for your comments :)

[Emily]

That experience must have been scary, but so unique! i'm glad you're still around to write about it! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Yes it definitely was Emily... to this day we still don't know why it happened but I just stopped breathing... kind of crazy!

[Emily]

Wow..truly incredible!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Emily :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

This was breathtaking. Bits of it reminded me of my own near death experience just a short 9 months ago...
It was a truly beautiful piece Aaron!
& on a side note, I'm glad you didn't die either! Love you!

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks I am also glad I didn't die :) BTW I am moved into my house and in it now :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Well duh! I'm sure you are glad! Lol. That's awesome! Now, when can I move in? LOL!

[AaronFreitas]

haha it's small :( I am not used to a small house

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Lol. I'll take the floor, if you don't want a bad mate.. tehe

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

*bed..

[AaronFreitas]

I never said that lol

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

LOL! Give me a few hours.. I have to pack.. LOL!

[AaronFreitas]

haha I see

[Evan]

This is powerful man. Thank you for having the courage to be this open! I love it.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Evan! It's different on here... everyone is pretty accepting so it's easy to open up and spill these feelings... thanks for the review

[Lesly Otero]

I really enjoy your work. Your writing is full of emotion and real feelings. I felt like I was in the hospital room as well. I love it!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Lesly I appreciate you stopping by new friend :)

[Michelle Coleman]

Rights away, the font made me smile. It is a nice added touch.

You were bored? Get bored some more.

Reading the perspective of the almost departing loved one was comforting. None of us really know what happens when we die and when someone is taken from us, especially unexpectedly, there is always that regret and fear of unspoken feelings of love and care die right alongside the departing.

There is redemption in this piece that we all so desperately need. I feel inspired to write my own version for my father who has recently come back into my life who also wants redemption, even if he doesn't expect it.

Maybe we should all write a love letter to our parents.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review Michelle.... the font turned out to be awesome and I was glad I came across it. :)

[Michelle Coleman]

Didn you find the font on this website?

[AaronFreitas]

No the font was on my microsoft word on my Macbook.... I always write in word then copy and paste into the cafe.

[Michelle Coleman]

I did not know the font would transfer. That is good to know.

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah it has worked... if you edit it after you post it reverts to a cafe generic one.

[Michelle Coleman]

Ohhh I see. I went back and tried to format my chapters correctly and it took out all them tabs.

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah the cafe does some weird stuff anytime you try to edit... thats why I do everything in word... if I need to edit I edit my writings that are saved in word then re copy and paste to keep it how I want :)

[modtoddinc]

Good to know.

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I enjoyed this kind tribute to your parents. The "out-of'body" approach to the writing in the first three stanzas; hovering over your parents as they hover over you. There is a surreal feel to this poetic prose, Aaron, and as others have so kindly stated, I am glad you pulled through too. One piece of advice that sticks with me as I read through your lines again is that no matter what differences people have between them they are capable of pulling together for that common goal, which in this case, was to be by the side of the one they loved. A fine story for sure.

[AaronFreitas]

You are the first person to mention the hovering.... I remember having that out-of-body moment and looking down on myself which made me feel like I was gone. There was much more to the memories of that experience that I will write about but I am glad you got that part. Thank you very much for the review :)

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You are welcome Aaron but I felt it so had to mention it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful story my friend in the poetry.
"With all that said, I love you mom and dad. No one is perfect and I can’t blame you for your faults. We only live in this world once and we only learn as we live and make mistakes. "
Above lines are true. We are just people doing our best. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Coyote! Life is about our ups and down, our failures and our successes. Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[ANTO]

Your story is shocking Aaron in as much as - you nearly died man ! - but its very poignant and touching. Tis a pity that bad things bring people together more readily than good occasions but such is the way of things. Im sure seeing them both in the room helped in your recovery and Im glad you're still here - because ...damn man - I hate writing reviews for ghosts !! I leave that to 'ghost-writers' lol.
Thanks for the RR Aaron, my friend.

[AaronFreitas]

haha ghost writers.... love it. Yeah I was so close to death.... just kind of stopped breathing and they never found out why. Somehow I came out of with no damage... I was lucky. Thanks for the review my friend!

[nazia]

Parents love is something that can't be replaced. No one can fill in that place. an emotional write and a personal piece (written out of boredom ?) that won my heart over..

[AaronFreitas]

Awww thank you Nazia :) I appreciate your review