This is Good-bye

Something that came to mind earlier

I waited patiently for you

Like a child lost in the snow

With no sense of where to go

 

Yet, you never came for me

Like an abandoned puppy

Waiting patiently for a family

 

So now I fade into the night

Without a love in sight

Or the will to continue to fight

 

This is good-bye

 

Author's Note

Review and comment... thanks!

Reviews

[SammMG]

The whole defeated underlined tone of knowing the time has come for a goodbye. It can be so painful, but in the case where saying goodbye and fulling understanding that the time has come for you to part can make the impact that less painful. Very good short, poignant piece right here. Good job.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Samm... much appreciated. Kept this one short and to the point.

[Madhu]

One usually writes what they feel (which may or may not be true), anyways, the emotions are very well portrayed in this poetry Aaron, well done! :) I wish I could read some more about the brighter sides of life in your writing (just something I wanted to say after reading most of your poems) :)

[AaronFreitas]

haha you will get the chance to... there is a lot of good.... I guess growing up a lot of the music has a big influence on my style of writing. I listen to a lot of stuff with darker and sadder lyrics so I tend to write that way although my life isn't necessarily all that bad. :) Thanks for the review

[gabrielle]

Although i find the ending quite melodramatic(the intention of the author is, perhaps, to let the reader feel deeply the longing and frustration), i find the rhythm to be smooth and the rhyme scheme is well-laid out.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks you very much for the review Gabrielle :)

[AaronFreitas]

haha and if you knew the full meaning behind exactly my thought process... who its about and whats its about you would understand :) but it is open for interpretation :)

[gabrielle]

My pleasure...this piece made me think of unrequited love.. :)

[nazia]

This is so sad Aaron.. Everyone of us deserved to be loved and taken care of.. Its such a painful sight, a heartbroken person left all alone to deal with his plight... A very emotional piece. well done :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Nadia :)

[Death's Poet]

Wow. This is beautifully writted and incredibly deep my friend. I totally understand the feelings that are in this poem. Amazing work as always

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks Shadow Poet! I appreciate your comments :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

This broke my heart. Well in the sense that I felt so much remorse and pain for the protagonist...doesn't matter if it's a pet or a person. Everyone deserves love and shelter and protection.

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks Nadia :) I appreciate you and your comments.... I'll have one for ya tomorrow... waiting til tomorrow to post it :)

[wordman]

left in the snow like a lost puppy ,a sad situation to be in

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah I tried to put together some sad lonely scenarios :) Thanks for the review

[wordman]

you made me cry

[AaronFreitas]

My bad... I'll have one tomorrow that I wrote earlier.... this one made me cry writing it. I'll post it tomorrow

[wordman]

be looking for it my friend

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :)

[W R Stowe]

Mrs right is out there have faith and patience she will come to you when you stop searching for love

Bill

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Bill :) I always appreciate you stopping by

[W R Stowe]

Never a problem Aaron

Bill

[~]

A most earned good bye i must say, for both the speaker and the receiver. the simple words really reflect that the speaker is at the end of the rope.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Miss Moonskittles :) idk why I always call you that haha thanks for reviewing... you know I appreciate you

[SheIsMe]

I can totally relate. Love this! Great job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend :) I appreciate you taking time to drop a line for me..

[sinNsincerity]

This is awesome bro! mad love!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much!