Another life Wasted

I had to write and get some things out... one of my grandfather's workers was found dead this morning... suicide

What could be so bad that you take your own life?

Not leaving a reason, tears fade into the night

You were only twenty years old so much life ahead

Now your family stands around asking why you’re dead

Always so happy, always carried a big smile

Living a life so simple, a life worth while

So what was it that pushed you over the edge? 

Grab the gun, lift it up and put it to your head

BANG!!! Just like that you took your own life

Makes me appreciate my sanity, I thank God for life

Reviews

[Relic]

The reasons are a mystery to those still alive. More than likely whatever bothered him festered over time and ate up all his thoughts. Depression is a horrible thing. A fried of mine committed suicide and to this day, no one can figure out why. From what I've heard, it consumes their thoughts in such a way all other thoughts including loved ones are deleted. Very scary and sad stuff. Good poem.

[AaronFreitas]

Yes indeed... hard to tell when no note, no warning signs and nothing to really take a good guess at. Thanks for your review... it is much appreciated :)

[Elisa]

If this is based on personal experience, I am so sorry for your loss. This reminds me of a really dark time in my life that I'm glad I came out of as a stronger person. Thank you for reminding me that I shouldn't take that experience (and life in general) for granted.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for your review... yes personal experience. One of my grandpas workers took his own life with a gun. Kind of crazy how it went down I guess. I have been in a very dark place... just could never do it and I am glad I found the strength to live rather than take my life. Thank you Elisa :)

[Haley-Anne]

I don't have much to say, but I will say that I like the fact that the words aren't sugarcoated. They're real and choppy, in a way that shows the state of mind you most likely were in. Which translates to the reader in a way that sugarcoated words could not.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Haley. I am not a sugarcoating kind of person :) I don't take time to figure out bigger and better words... I just write with the passion I have and let it come out how it comes out. The end result is me, my feelings my truth. Thanks for the review :)

[Haley-Anne]

For me when it comes to more personal poems (i believe all poems are personal some just mean more) I prefer to read poems that are written like yours. Anyway your welcome love.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you :) I appreciate that

[Lubna]

A very painful story narrated in this poem. The most precious thing we have is our life, we should treasure it and thank God for every breath. Nicely written.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Lubna! Thanks for taking the time to read it :)

[Death's Poet]

Wow. this is inspired Aaron. Absolutely beautifully written and such a sad topic to tackle. But you certainly did it flawlessly. Absolutely heart breaking in the best way poetry can be. Amazing work

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Shadow Poet :) I appreciate your review

[RiverRei]

I've been there. I've actually been the suicidal one. The book Thirteen Reasons Why changed my entire perspective on it though. It's an absolutely brilliant book by Jay Asher and I suggest it to anyone, suicidal or not. It gives insight to both sides. I'm sorry if you've had a friend or someone close to you take their own life. I know that it isn't easy to deal with. I'm here for you though. Wonderful write. Thank you for sharing :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thats awesome I will have to check that book out. I have also been there... it's life changing to get to a dark place like that. Thanks for the review my friend :)

[Unigoat]

Awh ;-;
Nice poem, very well written

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Unigoat :)

[SheIsMe]

This hits home. My mother took her life in the same fashion. I'm sorry for the loss of a good person. Nobody ever knows why. The demons in others are sometimes more fierce and in higher quantity than in ourselves. Great message about the survivors of tragedy.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... I am sorry to hear that about your mother. I would say suicide is the most difficult kind of death for family members to deal with... so many questions left unanswered. Thanks for the review my friend.

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

You weaved a nice work here, but the pain it leaves on one's mind did not call for much comment on the work itself- R.I.P I say to the departed soul.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend... it was a sad day and continues to be a sad week as everyone is trying to pick up the pieces.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend.
"Makes me appreciate my sanity, I thank God for life"
I lost two brothers to suicide. Death was sweeter than life. A hard topic. Life is a open field. Some people cannot see the beauty of the coming days. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ilerah]

Really well written, obviously you put some passion and great emotion into writing this. Good poem, well written!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much llerah. I appreciate your kind words :)