Nightmare

Written for RiverRei's nightmare contest :)

She said she loved me…                                    

So why am I tied naked to this bed?

A gag in my mouth keeping me quiet,

Handcuffs are holding me in place.

The room is dark,

Lit by just a black light.

My heart's beating rapidly…

I’m anxious for what’s to come.

She struts through the doorway,

Damn she is so sexy!

This must be some kind of sex game…

Oh count me in!

Then I see a shiny dagger in her hand,

She drags it slowly across her tongue…

Her sexy voice whispers in my ear,

“Tell me you want it Papi!”

Slowly, she zigzags the knife down my chest,

Calmly, romantically kissing on my neck….

Then just like that…

A slit across my chest!

I scream in pain but my cries are silent to her,

She speaks no words, just stares with an evil smirk…

She cuts me again, and again just to see me bleed…

The blood drips from her lips…

She chuckles, then with her hands,

Takes hold of my manhood….

She grabs the dagger as I scream and plead!!!

I’m desperate for air… I roll over…

Grabbing my pillow desperately,

Covered in sweat and barely breathing…

Damn these evil nightmares….

Hard to decipher evil from reality.

 

Reviews

[KWP]

Yowwwsssssaaaaa well thats not the kind of dream any man would want eh?

that moment - that few milliseconds - that snatch of breath when we just can't remember what reality we have chosen to reside - yeah I want to find that gap right there and explore between the dreams ...

your painted imagery was right on pace here my friend - well done (nice pic too) XX

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much KWP. I mentioned this before... if I had this dream I would just bathe in holy water for a week! lol thanks for the review :)

[613]

"My hearts beating rapidly…": "hearts" should be "heart's".

This poem is sensual at the start, eery & cringe-worthy in the middle & almost shocking at the conclusion. Dreams can seem scarily real! Great job.

- Brittney

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Brittney :) You are the first to catch that mistake... thanks my friend :)

[613]

(Catching errors like that is sort of my thing. Lol).
You're quite welcome!

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Excellent! This sounds like a real, lucid dream. Did you make this up, or did you dream it?

[AaronFreitas]

This one was made up for a contest... I did one like a week before that was a real nightmare. Thanks for the review my friend!

[SheIsMe]

Well it started out good. But I held my breath toward the end! Glad it was only and nightmare and not a memory!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Hahaha I would definitely have a higher pitch voice if it wasn't a nightmare lol

[SheIsMe]

I'm glad you get to keep your baritone voice (I'm assuming baritone)

[AaronFreitas]

haha possibly... only one way to find out haha

[Linda alexander]

Great imagination, so glad it was only a nightmare, different approach in writing

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks Linda... it was a little different from what I usually write... and this one was a made up nightmare for a contest. I started writing and telling the story as if I was living it and that was the end result... kind of scary and definitely would be a nightmare haha.... thanks for your review Linda :)

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[SammMG]

Really good piece of work. I love how the different realizations and emotions just flow together seamlessly. From excitement, to fear, to eventual realization. The tone of a nightmare just set it all the more.
The idea of deciphering nightmares from reality... I find that impossible because they are at times intertwined and one together. Unnoticeable until we take a look at the world around us.

[AaronFreitas]

Yes it is extremely hard to decipher nightmares... trying to find that exact meaning... trying to understand what is running through our mind while we rest. Thanks for your review buddy!

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Wow. That is one screwed up nightmare!
I feel bad for you!

Good piece though. Sometimes the weirdest ones are the best!

[AaronFreitas]

Haha this one was a made up nightmare for a contest. If I had this dream I'd freak out!!! Thanks Nikki :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Wow. The way you wrote it, made me think it was an actual nightmare you had! Great job! & Anytime friend..

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

I love this it's perfect, the flow, the imagery it's gripping, erotic and dark well done! - ATC

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ally... by the way I missed you haven't seen you around much. Thanks for your review :)

[Ruth]

Blooming hell...got me...on the edge of my seat! lol Tangible...sped my breathing up :)

[AaronFreitas]

Haha thanks :)

[RiverRei]

I can't imagine having my junk cut off, but I've had nightmares similar to this of being taken advantage of. I like a little game now and then too, but there's definitely a line. You did a great job of describing the scene and the feelings you encountered. I followed you the whole way through. Thanks for sharing :) Sorry you had to go through that nightmare :(

[AaronFreitas]

:) It wasn't a nightmare til the end lol