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Just some things that came out... no punctuation just read it fast and keep the flow :)

Is it me or is it you

Complications from the truth

You should have lied

You should have tried

To fill the soul with many lies

 

The truth can kill

And lies don’t heal

They ease the pain before the kill

You broke my trust

Teased with lust

Made me feel

What was never real

 

A sickening feeling

Deep inside

Hearts on fire

Burning bright

You won me over

With lustful screams

Then slowly drowned

Away my dreams

 

My heart was blind

My sight alive

Could not see past all the lies

Too blind to see

Too dumb to read

All the signs

In front of me

 

Now I’m alone

I should have known

To never trust you

In my home

You failed to see

The good in me

And now you’re just

A memory

 

 

 

Author's Note

Please let me know your thoughts... thanks

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Hmmm... As for the poem, i think its very well done. As for the meaning...now i'm speaking, based on personal experience... Well, i'd only write poems like this, if my relationship with someone i love would break. When someone i love...or to pick up the poem's atmosphere a little better, someone i used to love shatters my heart. Anyhow, you did great.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you IM.... I appreciate your review :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome:)

[fattycbreezy52]

amazing.!
i actually feel that now I am nothing but a complete stranger to the word called "love"
They come,they deceive ,they leave!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Yanina McKnight]

While reading this poem, I felt the pain and suffering of betrayal. Your word choice is simple, yet revealing. The flow throughout the work enhances the imagery within the poem.
Excellent work!
-Yanina

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Yanina :) I appreciate your review.... I am glad you liked it

[Yanina McKnight]

Yes, I liked it a lot. and You're welcome!

[JayceeC]

One of the things I like about your writing is how honest it is. It's straight up and from the heart. The truth can be very hurtful and painful but I've always found it easier to deal with than the lies and why they think lies are necessary. All they do is shatter trust.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Jan I appreciate that.... it's almost always straight up and from the heart my friend :)

[sinNsincerity]

Great write man, My heart goes out to you on this one!

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks buddy I appreciate it :)

[Mirab Irfan]

Fabulous! I really like it Aaron! Especially the ending lines! Good job :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Mirab... thanks for taking time to read and review I appreciate it :)

[Ishita Dixit]

Wow Aaron!
I loved the flow and the meaning.
And people who can't see the good in you should best remain a memory.
They probably didn't deserve you in the first place.
You owned it bud! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Yes indeed Ishita.... just a memory for those :) Thanks I appreciate your review!

[SCRIBBLER]

No man has a good enough memory to be a successful liar: Abraham Lincoln.

My friend this has yet again triggered emotions that I never thought I world feel again.

Thank You

[AaronFreitas]

I am glad you could really connect to the words my friend... much appreciated :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

You've got to watch those memories, Aaron. It takes quite a while for them to fade, but they are certainly worth their weight in poetry!

[AaronFreitas]

Yes indeed Kelly... always makes for a good write at least :) Thanks for your review my friend

[Madison Rose]

Excellent poem Aaron! What I really enjoy about reading your writing is you have a variety of topics, and your poems, and personal stories put together would make an interesting read, and great book :)

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks my friend! I really want to do a poetry book! It would be something to be proud of even if it sells 3 copies lol. I appreciate your review Madison :)

[modtoddinc]

Nice job, the poem glides toward an excellent conclusion. A statement. Thank you for sharing your art.

~peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for reading and reviewing Todd! Much appreciated buddy :)