Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Just some thoughts

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God, can you hear me?

It’s Aaron… I need your help.

Please rescue my soul.

 


© 2015 AaronFreitas



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I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and gettin.. read more



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really good !!!!!.... 90 points

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Zunie :)
zunie frost

2 Years Ago

welcome !!!
Wow....you have just struck a chord with every living person! A fine pen writes like this.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Jane :)
We all fee this way sometime.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Yes we do my friend :) Thanks for your review :)
Well done again!!! i like this very much!!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you this was my second attempt at a Senryu... not as easy to do I found :)
Rescue mine too!! Simple yet simply captivating. You have a rare window Aaron. And I love that! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
silent poet

2 Years Ago

You're welcome Aaron :)
The answer to your question is probably "No, He can't." But you can. A plaintive human cry, but enlightenment is available. Regardless of philosophy, or how one views the universe, this is a nice poem. A touch sad, maybe, but nice.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Roland... I like your take on it... sparks some thought in this mind :) Appreci.. read more
A beautiful simple plea in an intricate format - the whole package - I think ancient senryu masters would approve of this spiritual write my friend.
Superb

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much ANTO... if I remember right this was my second one... and so far I've only done.. read more
A deep senryu pertaining to the duality of faith and doubt. Nicely done.

~peace, Todd

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thanks buddy... thanks for the review :)
Such short poem, but it's so powerful!
Keep it up!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Emily :)

have you considered writing multiple senryu together to form a larger piece?

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

No I haven't really... I may look into it now :) Thanks
Ashley Flynn

2 Years Ago

Anytime :)

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