Are we alone?

Are we alone?

A Story by AaronFreitas
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Real short true story... this was me last night.

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I could feel it… she was standing there watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

 


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alf
Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Than.. read more
alf

2 Years Ago

Cool!! I'll keep reading your writes!!!!
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you buddy I appreciate that



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Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Good job once again.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ooh! It gave me goosebumps. I like how at the beginning you make it seem like that the person who is watching you was actually real and alive, and the last line was like a plot twist mixed with a cliffhanger. Great write!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Alondra :) Appreciate your kind words my friend :)
Tomoe Tellez

2 Years Ago

You're welcome. Thank you for sharing. Hey, would you mind reviewing my novel, I would appreciate it.. read more
this is cool!.. I like it :)
I too, sometimes woke up from sleep and feels like someone's
watching me...it feels so real but when I tried to
to held the person's hand it vanished through the dark night..hmnnn...good writing :) it was beautiful!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Fate :) It's definitely a creepy feeling to wake up like that. Thanks for your review my .. read more
Fate

2 Years Ago

you're very welcome :)
Dreamy tale.
You are longing for someone.
Loved the smooth serene flow of the story.
Enjoyed the imagery.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I definitely am Jyoti.... glad you enjoyed it :) Thank you
Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Hope you get what you want.
You are welcome.
Aaron, how are you? It's been a long time since the last time i was on this site....this is an interesting piece though very short one hahah. What i got from this is...i don't know, it kinda brings a painful memory, maybe a memory of a loved one who has passed away or simply gone without a trace? The feeling of terror and anguish from losing someone we love very much, maybe. Oh yeah, is this based on your experience? That's kinda creepy...and heartbreaking.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

This was based on a night I had alone in my house that I currently live in. I have had some crazy e.. read more
This sounds like it could be a lucid dream. I've had a few in my lifetime, and it's a very strange experience. I think the answer to your question is no, we're never really alone.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Samuel... it definitely is a strange experience that I'd prefer not to have :) Thank you .. read more
There are a few theories I could throw your way. One … the dead are visiting you before they return to source; two you are manifesting almost to material from your dreams. Or it is a slow fade of a dream vision. I've have similar visions? and have had other people also see the visions at the same time so I am leering of it being the last explanation, at least not the all of them. Let me know if you figure it out. Eery write.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Yeah it is weird... I still experience things in this house... had a really creepy scary one today t.. read more
Pryde Foltz

2 Years Ago

Try to be as positive as you can and you will have positive experiences with this:)
I think it is fascinating Aaron....was it a ghost?....your imagination?.....a dream?.....nice write!!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I believe it's a ghost/spirit in my house. I've had a few encounters... keep a bottle of holy water.. read more
Good question, nice job Aaron, I enjoy reading your masterpieces

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend :)
In the case if we are alone our mind gets deluded and starts to imagine things and people. So technically our minds will never keep us alone.

Posted 2 Years Ago



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