Are we alone?

Are we alone?

A Story by AaronFreitas
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Real short true story... this was me last night.

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I could feel it… she was standing there watching me as I slept. Subconsciously I awoke to ask her if everything was ok but she didn't respond. I rolled over and looked up to see her shadow... she looked me in my eyes then walked away. Sometimes I forget I live alone but in reality we are never really alone are we?

 


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alf
Hi Aaron. I am not a great fan of prose in poetry, and so very seldom read it. You have written well and it was a pleasant read, but personally, I think that format lacks punch. I did love the wording, you got it right !!! just . . . I'm into structure, not reading books, I guess, alf

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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I hear ya buddy... I just had to get out what happened to me when I woke up... true story lol. Than.. read more
alf

2 Years Ago

Cool!! I'll keep reading your writes!!!!
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you buddy I appreciate that



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haha! scary paranormal type story....I liked it :) Good write!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheOne&Only

2 Years Ago

:) no problem
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I'm thinking of doing more with this story :)
TheOne&Only

2 Years Ago

Ill be on the look out :)
Oh my! A bit scary, but I can see the very profound meaning in it...nicely written, my friend.
Maumil

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Maumil :) It is a bit scary especially those that read it at night before bed t.. read more
Aaron, Sometimes I think we become so connected to people that there is a connection that goes beyond what we really understand. I think those connections are strongest when we are first waking or just going to sleep. We carry those people in our hearts, but for some, it is even more than that. My ex used to live about 90 miles from me, and there were times when sudden feelings would come over me and either his name would pop up or memory of his face. At first I ignored it, but would find out talking to him later that something had happened. I started calling him as soon as I could after it happened, and we used to joke about me having ESP, but it never really happened with other people. Sometimes it was good and sometimes it was bad but whatever emotion I felt, matched his. It took years for it to stop happening, and sometimes I imagine there is still a bit there, even though we both moved on long ago.
This reminds me of that feeling. It's like having a direct link. Some twins have it so why not other people in other forms. I think we believe it is not rational ans so we suppress it, but it is hard to suppress upon waking. Our guards are not up yet, the conscious mind has not taken over.
Just my thoughts today given your description. ~Jan

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I hear ya Jan... well whoever it is could at least come over and cuddle lol... I've heard of twins s.. read more
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The concept you've used here is the total opposite of what I've usually come across. They say we are alone, ultimately really alone. And your story here spices things up with your imagination and it's all very interesting. The best thing about it: it's creepy; oh I wonder who she was..

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Rana :) It's a house on my families ranch so I believe it's been mostly family here. I k.. read more
Rana

2 Years Ago

Ah. You're quite lucky to have such a thrilling place to live in. Have fun exploring! :)
This was really good! And true. I like this a lot, nothing to criticise. Keep Writing!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Aww thanks Shea... I wasn't sure how to format or what direction to go but I wanted to tell the stor.. read more
I think if you worked a little bit on this you could have a super cool horror story poem on your hands. Incorporate the fact that it is you and it is a true story, that it happened just yesterday. You could even incorporate the date, and say for example, strange things happening on the 13th i could maybe understand, but why the 14th, thats not a suspicious day. (Although maybe it is for where you stay, I would check the building and the areas history.) So keep working on it, and thanks for sharing, and please stay safe!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thanks Nadia maybe I will play with it some more and develop the story a little more. :) Appreciat.. read more
Very interesting read and thoughts in this piece. A little of the bump in the night. Was it she or an even bigger illusion. Maybe it was just your angel checking in on you young man. Great work and thanks.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Must be nice to get paid to be wrong all the time lol
Willard Wells

2 Years Ago

Yep and by the way. Sorry to take your dark that you treasure and turn it to sunshine and light. Hah.. read more
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

haha it's all good my friend
If its true then how are you still living in that house Aarao?? its haunted..
BTW really nice expression... left me wondering about so many things... Nice write :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Well I can't say its the first house I've lived in with spirits. I think maybe I am just getting us.. read more
OMG! You are living in haunted house..... :P

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

It might be... it's a little scary. When I moved in and fixed it all up my grandpa came by and told.. read more
Jeyanthi

2 Years Ago

next time be sure to ask her name.... :)
Your guardian angel watching over you while you sleep? :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Hopefully! haha thanks buddy
Julia Mars

2 Years Ago

Anytime my friend. :)

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