Padded Walls

Something different... no not about me :)

Wrap me up... strap me up

Throw away the key

Locked in a room, I lay to spoon

With a shadow of me

      Shut them up!!!

      Tell them to stop!!!

      These voices wont cease!

Rocking on the floor, feeling like a w***e

Thoughts unwind

Bite my tongue, just for fun

Where is my mind?

Pad these walls… ignore the calls

I must be crazy

Hear the cries… my soul lies

Visions hazy

       “Just do it

       kill yourself

       do the world a favor”

I cannot lie… the voice inside

Says take my life

So I jump to fly

I fall and cry

But cannot die

So wrap me up, strap me up

Throw away the key

It’s obvious this padded room

Is the end of me,

 

 

Author's Note

Read and review please :)

Reviews

[Maja]

Woah this one's actually pretty scary but I enjoyed reading it :D I especially love the third, fourth, and the last two lines, because it gave the feeling that there's no escape not just from the padded room, but from the condition itself. Great poem and I'm glad I read it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Maja :) I am glad you liked it. I tried to do something a little different with this write and I am glad you as a reader enjoyed :) Thank you

[Passengerr]

Brilliant.. that's what I think of this 'different' piece.. scary but brilliant and vividly expressed. you're an amazing writer my friend..

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much buddy... I tried to do something a little different from a different perspective so I am glad you liked it :)

[alf]

Deep Aaron, very deep!! I could almost believe you are about to . . . but phew!!! glad you are not!! Hi man, I'm back. Just brief reviews for a few days until I catch up, then back for real!! alf

[AaronFreitas]

Sweet glad you're back! I am in the same boat got a ton of reviews to do also :) Thanks buddy!

[alf]

Thanks, my friend!!

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Chaotic and gripping...perfect for me (y)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :)

[Madhu]

Aaron, what an amazing poem! Pretty crazy and weird but at the same time amazingly put together! Thank you for sharing this! I really loved reading this one! :)
"wrap me up, strap me up
Throw away the key"

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Madhu :) I tried my be a little creative and do something a little different :)

[Zoey Ree]

This poem is brilliant in the visualization and the deep and utter bewilderment. The pain, the darkness, splendid work and the ending was so abrupt, but definitely fitting of the style. Great job, would love to read more of your works!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Zoey :) This one was slightly different but I had a lot of fun with it :)

[MsJewel]

You have outdone yourself.... dark, gripping and absolutely haunting...
I'm at a loss for words. Absolutely brilliant writing.

Julie

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Julie... it was something I wanted to try... something a little different :) I am glad you like it :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
awesome write Aaron......
gripping......dark.......sad.....
whatever i do i hurt myself ...... so better lock me up for my own good.......
amazing poem.....
i loved it!!!
:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Pushkar... there is a wide array of thoughts that came to mind when I saw this picture and it's almost impossible to re-create what runs through the characters mind but I tried to make it erratic yet gripping. Appreciate your review buddy :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. A padded room. The ending for many. Many kinds of cages. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... it was an idea I had so I just went with it. Appreciate your review buddy :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well. I liked the poem and you are welcome.

[Cherub]

This poem grabs the readers attention and i really like that!! Ive felt like this before, sir and it is n o t pretty. I pass on the good vibes bro.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank for the review.. sorry you felt like that I am sure it is not fun. :)

[RAOrourke]

Very Compelling poem Aaron, really grabs the reader and throws them in the padded room feeling the anguish great job

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... glad you got that feeling from reading these words :) Appreciate your review