Without you

Without you

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Watching one of my fav shows... wrote some stuff for fun

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This is probably a little past due,

but as I keep waiting for time

to heal these wounds… I only find

myself still missing you.

 

I know I was so far from perfect,

No matter how hard I tried…

I could never find happiness... yet it

kills when I see tears in your eyes.

 

I never wanted to hurt you,

Only a chance to love you.

But the harder I tried the 

farther away I pushed you.

 

Maybe I was never good enough.

 

So I found ways to cope and to

be happy momentarily… never

realizing the path of destruction

and heartbreak I would leave behind.

 

Maybe the world will be a better

place without me… I’ll never know.

What I do know is that I’ll never

be a better “me” without you.


© 2015 AaronFreitas



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Poignant piece. The pain and loss of relationship; something every human being experiences. Here you have captured its essence. The pleasure and pain, the truth and blame, elegantly written and evenly delivered. A wonderful poem from an excellent poet. Thank you for rr, and sharing your art.

Peace, Todd

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

3 Years Ago

Thank you Todd... sorry for the late response haven't been on much buddy.


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This was really good, its something that every person can relate to. Loosing someone when a relation ship ends. Often times people don't understand how you feel after a breakup but this just touches it perfectly

Posted 2 Years Ago


Man, those last four lines struck an emotional chord! I think this might just be my favorite piece yet out of all your works, Aaron. It delivers a message known by most people in the world in an emotional way that is relatively difficult to attain, and that makes it stand out amongst others like it. Superb job, my friend! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thanks buddy! It seems like a lifetime ago that I wrote this piece... been in a non-writing state f.. read more
DoormanDan

2 Years Ago

Trust me, it will eventually come back so long as you still like to write. I've just gotten complet.. read more
Pure passionate feelings, the way you express those lovely feelings is an extraordinary way. Well done my dear friend. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Insight :)
For some reason the last verse of this poem really reminds me of the song Pride's Not Hard To Swallow. In particular the last two lines. What I like about this piece is that it really shows how when we think that we are doing good for someone else, when we think that we are protecting them from hurt, it's not always right sadly.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I will have to look them up don't think I've heard of them before. You make some good points, I'm g.. read more
nece poem. you are really sensitive because the words are deeply coming from the bottom of your heart

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much... yeah I'm a softy haha... appreciate your comment :)
I feel like I've felt like this before.
This piece is so relatable & has so much emotion in it. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thanks for your review my new friend :) I tried my best to find exactly what I was feeling and share.. read more
This one is well penned, strong and emotional. I could feel the pain, top to bottom good work.

Armin. ....

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much armin :)
armin

2 Years Ago

your welcome I loved the final lines, moving ...
I can relate to this on a very emotional level. The amount of pain that can be caused by relationships like these is immense and terrifying. You have perfectly described it here. Excellent detail and explanation, all in all, a very nice piece of writing. You've astounded me once more.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you my friend... I think I could write about the pain of heartbreak and failed relationships e.. read more
Obscured by the Shadows

2 Years Ago

And I appreciate you sharing out your experiences and feelings, lets people know they aren't alone.
I can relate to this in many levels; beautifully captured. Thank you for sharing this, I enjoyed reading your piece.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Gloria :) I'm glad you could relate to it :)
Wow dark and painful. A strong piece of heartache and acceptance of flaws and mistakes.


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Kansas :) Yes indeed... mistakes linger in the mind for eternity no matter how .. read more
Southern_Writes

2 Years Ago

Your welcome hun

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