Last Dance

Last Dance

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.


© 2015 AaronFreitas



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One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the .. read more



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A great read, Aaron. I especially like the imagery painted here, with the feeling of love palpable in the air..lovely. What struck me most was your ending..and how it is so real, it could frighten us..keep them coming, Aaron!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Tks :) Glad you enjoyed it
From the tone of the poem, and a few lines, I felt like there'd be a twist where the guy is a vampire or something, and he's found his next victim, and his love is what would make him decide to inflict the same fate on her. So I was really surprised when I got to the ending, that there wasn't a 'monster' kind of twist, but then felt that sadness as this person chooses to let potential happiness walk away and remain bound to his loneliness. So much emotion, really beautiful piece of writing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much. It really was set up and could go anyway with a twist... it makes sense that y.. read more
Such tragedy. This is very well done. As I am reading; feeling the love, I became totally absorbed in the direction I assumed we were heading, and BAM! Unexpected outcome revealed. Great job! The balance is spot on. The flow is nice and disrupted masterfully at the crucial point. I enjoyed this poem very much.

Peace, Todd

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Haha I am glad I caught you off guard. When I wrote it I didn't have the intentions of it turning b.. read more
Sometimes there will be an opportunity, only one for the grab, and it is sad how we miss that chance when it comes. Beautiful piece, and thank you for sharing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your review. Someday she will be there for the taking :)
A pure love is destined for anyone with a heart, and from everything I read, you most definitely have one. Let HER come to YOU. So well written, Aaron.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much :) I am patiently waiting although it would be sooooo nice if she would hurry u.. read more
SheIsMe

2 Years Ago

Patience, dannyson. Patience.
At the beginning I was thinking to myself, "I would swoon over any guy that think like this!" But then it got sad and broke my heart! Very well written, though! Really loved it

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Aww so if I reached out with my hand for a dance you would turn me down now? haha :)
Interesting because it was not what I was expecting from the title but I liked the acceptance at the end. I love the descriptions.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you... glad you still liked it even though it wasn't what you were expecting. I appreciate yo.. read more
I like this..

Take my hand and just trust,
Trust and believe in this moment.
My heart is empty - but truthfully,
That means I have more love to give.



perfectly beautiful:)



but then its a sad one..but i like it..


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Fate :) I tried to bring out the romantic side yet keep the dark side that I typically wr.. read more
Fate

2 Years Ago

you're welcome sir :)
Such a sad ending to a poem that made me smile in the beginning. A dream! You made it a dream! You just busted my bubble! I was hoping you had found this angel, and that happy times were going to be the norm for your future.
Great structure for this write Aaron. I like the flow and the way that you choose to rhyme of not based on what the feel is, not forcing word choices. Overall well written and a dance worth dancing, despite the dream.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Jan. Sorry to bust your bubble haha... I was so happy to see your name pop up on.. read more
JayceeC

2 Years Ago

Still around and writing a bit. Rarely sending read requests though. Haven't had a lot of time tho r.. read more
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Understandable. I've been in and out when I can but just not as active. Hope his surgery went good.. read more
Loneliness and disbelief. Did any of it really happen or was it just a figment of imagery, flowing beautifully through the night.
Well done, truly enchanting!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Bluefire :) I am waiting for this to come true :)
Bluefire

2 Years Ago

Aw, good luck, I'm sure it may happen

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