Last Dance

Last Dance

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.


© 2015 AaronFreitas



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One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the .. read more



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I admire that you have a constant rhyme that is broken in the end, with the spirit of your romantic fantasy. We are repeatedly graced by the beauty of others, and it can be a trying task to accept their wonder, if we do not first acknowledge our own. Love yourself! You have a lovely way of honestly presenting your emotions - be proud f yourself and meaningful bonds will emerge. Nice write :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the awesome review and feedback... I am in that process of learning to love myself :) .. read more
such beauty and romance, I adore the soft love it radiates.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Jacqueline :) Soft love is my other name haha
Jacquelene Vanessa Moreno

2 Years Ago

lol that's a good :))
You capture the 'fear of flying' in this sad and poignant piece Aaron

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much John... haven't seen you on here much buddy hope all is well :)
John Alexander McFadyen

2 Years Ago

Just need a rest Aaron. Trying to keep my RRs down. Hope all is well with you.
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

I understand that completely my friend :)
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Aaron, This may be the best work of yours I've had the pleasure of read/reviewing. So warm and gentle, a heart-fluttering reminder of moments such as this in many readers' lives...you show us true love coming to fruition, but then she walks away, out of your sightline, out of your life. The hurt felt by you is real, it's palpable...but it is written with the feeling like you've been there before, felt that pain. Just a wonderful story poem, extremely well written, guy. This is going into my library favorites, and I thank you for that. take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your amazing review Dan! Definitely made my day :) With most my work there i.. read more
dan

2 Years Ago

It's my pleasure Aaron. take care...dan
Oh, heartbreaking Aaron! Sounds like he might have missed a perfect opportunity for real love. Never, never, never let a good one go! I hope she returns. :o)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Someday the right woman will come or I will find her :) Til then I shall wait patiently. :)
WAH! this is so saddening... it was really good. Makes the reader so emotional! lol why?!
I love it though! Keep it up!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MissLaine

2 Years Ago

haha lol ;) thanks! how is she your hero? hehe
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Well maybe not hero... maybe my fantasy woman! haha
MissLaine

2 Years Ago

haha! :) i see
Awwww I love this so much!! :) It's so romantic and it's so true. Well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Kathryn :) I am glad you liked it... tried to show the romantic side a little :.. read more
Truly heart breaking. As I read the ending I felt a pang in my chest of sad realization. This is very similar to something one of the characters in my current book would do. "For what beauty would want to love a monster so corrupt and evil as I."
A great short story packed into a poem :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Amber :) What an awesome character haha appreciate your read and review :)
This is a really beautiful piece, Aaron. I mean, it's wonderful and tragic and just brilliantly expressed. "We accept the love we think we deserve." is the only way to sum it up, I think.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

You make a great point with the quote... it's so true! Thanks for your kind words... I'm going to t.. read more

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