Last Dance

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I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.

Author's Note

Please comment :)

Reviews

[Aries1984]

One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the way it feels right to me and the flow that I'm saying it with. I'm glad you connect with my work and understand what I do... maybe better than I know what and why I do it sometimes :)

[Ohhhwillow]

I admire that you have a constant rhyme that is broken in the end, with the spirit of your romantic fantasy. We are repeatedly graced by the beauty of others, and it can be a trying task to accept their wonder, if we do not first acknowledge our own. Love yourself! You have a lovely way of honestly presenting your emotions - be proud f yourself and meaningful bonds will emerge. Nice write :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for the awesome review and feedback... I am in that process of learning to love myself :)

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

such beauty and romance, I adore the soft love it radiates.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Jacqueline :) Soft love is my other name haha

[Jacquelene Vanessa Moreno]

lol that's a good :))

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You capture the 'fear of flying' in this sad and poignant piece Aaron

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much John... haven't seen you on here much buddy hope all is well :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Just need a rest Aaron. Trying to keep my RRs down. Hope all is well with you.

[AaronFreitas]

I understand that completely my friend :)

[dan]

Aaron, This may be the best work of yours I've had the pleasure of read/reviewing. So warm and gentle, a heart-fluttering reminder of moments such as this in many readers' lives...you show us true love coming to fruition, but then she walks away, out of your sightline, out of your life. The hurt felt by you is real, it's palpable...but it is written with the feeling like you've been there before, felt that pain. Just a wonderful story poem, extremely well written, guy. This is going into my library favorites, and I thank you for that. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you so much for your amazing review Dan! Definitely made my day :) With most my work there is always a reason or purpose... maybe even a thought from my life that sparks my writes so I am glad you could read it and understand the meaning the way I felt it. Thank you Dan you are too awesome buddy!

[dan]

It's my pleasure Aaron. take care...dan

[Suzy Hazelwood]

Oh, heartbreaking Aaron! Sounds like he might have missed a perfect opportunity for real love. Never, never, never let a good one go! I hope she returns. :o)

[AaronFreitas]

Someday the right woman will come or I will find her :) Til then I shall wait patiently. :)

[MissLaine]

WAH! this is so saddening... it was really good. Makes the reader so emotional! lol why?!
I love it though! Keep it up!

[AaronFreitas]

haha thanks MissLaine :) It's a little different from most my work but hey.. I'm waiting for that secretary from your story... I wouldn't let her go lol :)

[MissLaine]

:) no problem! hehe. Oh? haha! ;) I haven't had an idea yet to go on for that story.. for a part 2.. but I will write one when an idea strikes!

[AaronFreitas]

haha yay! Well, she is my hero anyways :)

[MissLaine]

haha lol ;) thanks! how is she your hero? hehe

[AaronFreitas]

Well maybe not hero... maybe my fantasy woman! haha

[MissLaine]

haha! :) i see

[Kathryn Smith]

Awwww I love this so much!! :) It's so romantic and it's so true. Well done!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Kathryn :) I am glad you liked it... tried to show the romantic side a little :)

[Amber Lily]

Truly heart breaking. As I read the ending I felt a pang in my chest of sad realization. This is very similar to something one of the characters in my current book would do. "For what beauty would want to love a monster so corrupt and evil as I."
A great short story packed into a poem :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Amber :) What an awesome character haha appreciate your read and review :)

[Shea McWilliams]

This is a really beautiful piece, Aaron. I mean, it's wonderful and tragic and just brilliantly expressed. "We accept the love we think we deserve." is the only way to sum it up, I think.

[AaronFreitas]

You make a great point with the quote... it's so true! Thanks for your kind words... I'm going to try and trick myself and tell myself I deserve someone awesome :) haha