Cry for Help

Here is something I wrote about 8 years ago... originally written to be a song back in the day but made a few adjustments to share.

Nothing but my shadow staring back at me

I walk alone down these empty streets

A child nearby asks for change

To buy his fix, what a f*****g shame

 

Down the street… a w***e for sale

Searching for love, you couldn’t tell

Sex for crack is her way of life

Life’s clock is ticking waiting for her to die

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

A thieving bum worn to his destined domicile

Begs for forgiveness, yet lives in denial

No room for him in our over populated jails

He’s left to slowly descend into hell

 

A mother walks this forlorn street

Disappointed and crumbled in defeat

And even though she tries to hide her pain

You hear her cries bleed out in vain

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

Destructive behavior that will never be fixed

To these evil streets you are affixed

You take everything for granted like you do

What would you do if it happened to you?

Author's Note

Please share your thoughts :)

Reviews

[Dani The Unreviewed]

It's a great write, about something we either change, or better get.used to it.
Since not everyone wants to do anything, other than point fingers, and wait for someone else to do something... I don't know what to do. let's not forget, that nothing, and no one forced these people to do what they do. (other than the prostitutes).
Whatever they go through, is just a simple consequence of their choices, and actions. Though i think we would need to help them. But then again, you, or i cannot do much on our own.

[AaronFreitas]

You make a good point... in all honesty without a boatload of money the only things we really can do is volunteer or raise awareness. It comes down to money when thinking of really wanting to make a change in someones life. I know for a distant relative... he was on the streets with a major drug problem. Homeless by consequences of choices he made. It took his family going to pick him up, financially and emotionally supporting him and getting him help that got him back on the right path. Took quite a bit of energy and time from several people just to help one. It's hard to really spark a mass change and it does suck for most of these people, once they are in this dark spot in life there isn't a way out. Appreciate your awesome review.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

you're welcome. :)

[prachi prangya agasti]

A reality nonetheless. I like the way you portrayed it through your poem.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you prachi :) Glad you liked it... it's been so long since I've seen you on here :)

[Irenic]

a poem which snatched a picture of bitter reality. it is amazing and very vivid. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much irenic :)

[Irenic]

Welcome ...................................
:)

[Tomoe Tellez]

I love your dark sense of writing, you have such a great of ability when it comes to writing in a dark mood, and the way you handle words in every line makes it all the more appealing to read. Great job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Alondra :) Appreciate your kind words :)

[Gaurav Bhattacharya]

Reality is what it is. No fairy tale endings. Well done for writing this honest piece.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Gaurav... just a lot of painful and dark things in this world and thankful I'm not in one of those situations :)

[Ms. Twitch]

The imagery and darkness makes this a beautiful piece. I felt a beat behind it while I was reading...thank you for sharing. I enjoyed it, and inspires me to change my perspective in my writing and explore a different side of me as a writer.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks Gloria... I originally wrote this to be a song then I changed it up slightly to post on here. I want to hear the beat you had lol maybe we will free style this at Venice Beach lol... appreciate your review :)

[Ms. Twitch]

If Venice has any open mics, I'm so game! I've only been to one out by Fairfax HS but it was an awesome experience. Still need to brave the stage, but hopefully one of these nights!

[AaronFreitas]

haha thats awesome... I'm trying to focus on getting better on guitar... my fingers hurt right now! haha Haven't seen ya in a while it's nice to see ya on here :)

[Ms. Twitch]

That was actually one of my goals but I'm currently on the road to becoming a brewer. I've been spending time brewing, writing in between as well. It's good to be back :) going to make sure I don't take such a long break from this again..

[Omikron]

I should stop reading your texts, because they all seem to give me shivers.
I love how this text is so raw and "ugly", it shows a picture of a bitter reality, great beginning, great end, everything is just flawless by describing imperfections.
I also love how you paint a picture so easily, it makes it easier to take the poem to heart.

Just splendid.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for your awesome review my friend :) I try to project that raw emotion in my writes. It may not always be formatted great but I try to produce honest content :) Thanks

[Ashley Renegade]

An honest look at reality. Too often we turn our heads to avoid seeing the ugly things in the world so we can pretend they aren't there. What a great piece demanding we take notice!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ashley :) There are a lot of ugly realities in this life :)

[Obscured by the Shadows]

It's sad to think that, nowadays, if you hear about things like this on the news or over the radio, one of the first things that you here is "it's just life." No, it's what the media and people around us have convinced us is the norm, it is actually a disgusting reality that no one chooses to face and we simply ignore it, pretending it doesn't exist. What would I do if it were me? Well, I don't know, I pray to God I am never put into that situation, but I do know one thing, it would probably be my own fault.

Thank you for sharing this poem, it is an enlightening piece and I look forward to reading anything else you may have written. The emotion in this is powerful, the word choice is strong and the pattern is eye catching. Great work.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for your review my friend :) Yeah, I also pray I'm never in a place that dark where all I have is a little will to survive on the streets. Appreciate it :)

[Obscured by the Shadows]

You're welcome :D I look forward to reading other pieces of work.

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You can only help those who want to help themselves, Aaron. Until then...you either watch or look away. I learned these things the hard way. True, it's good to help those in need. I don't give them money though. I offer them food, socks, a hat and gloves. I'm not supporting their addictions. Powerful and heartfelt writing, dear poet

[AaronFreitas]

Very understandable... I am the same way. I will buy someone a meal if they are hungry but I'm not giving cash to feed an addiction. I read online today an article about a man in Iowa who offered jobs to two men begging for money and both turned him down. Some people either want to help themselves or they don't. Thanks for your review lynn :)

[WinterLady]

Would of loved the song just as much , thank you for sharing .

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you WinterLady :) At the time I wrote this I was singing in a local rock band :) I never worked on this one after writing but I still liked it... thanks for your comments