Just a feeling

Just a feeling

A Poem by AaronFreitas

The taste of your skin 

explodes 

passion into my heart.  

 

The touch of your body

launches 

my mind into a fanatical eruption.  

 

Indescribable 

is the sensation 

of being with you, 

knowing

only a miracle from God himself

can guide you to me

as if it was destiny.  

 

I feel as if I’m walking through heaven

and you’re behind a half open door… 

teasing me 

with the angel I am missing out on. 

 

Unlike any emotion I have ever felt before,

Your inner beauty 

brings me to my knees, 

begging God please, 

to let me explore 

a world of ecstasy with you- 

who brings upon me

an epiphany of the reality of my destiny;

just guide you to me. 

 

I do not want to go on living 

this way, 

knowing that I could

fill your heart

with love for eternity.

And even though you have love,

I find you here

with me.

On my mind

in my heart 

I’m attached emotionally.  

 

What am I to do

with this feeling 

I have no control of?  

Should I 

fade

before your eyes; 

leave you to be?

 

Or should I take this chance

and trust that you will see……


© 2015 AaronFreitas



Author's Note

AaronFreitas
This is a piece I wrote in December of 08... wish I remembered who it was about!
Edited to a format which I like much better than the free write I had. Thanks to Jan aka JayceeC :)

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This was really good, and full of true emotion, not just words. You wrote in a way that allows the reader to experience the feeling the speaker is experiencing as well, and that is a quality not many writers have, but all need so desperately.
Wonderful job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for the review and the compliments Anne :) I appreciate it very much :)



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Intense passion emoted in these sparkling words. You're a master at this! Thanks for sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Gaurav :) I try my best buddy
Gaurav Bhattacharya

1 Year Ago

Your best is amazing.
Wow.... I got shivers. This is passion beyond passion and sence, very very good.
Fifty Shades of Grey is nothing compared to this piece. I like the controlled but still brainstorming concept, that you let it all flow but with a good disposition and control. I'd call this a talent.

I gotta go and shake the shivers off now.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Haha thank you very much :) Haven't even seen Fifty Shades I may have to check it out :)
Very beautiful and has a nice feel to it. I love how you did this. Packed so much meaning into these words. Well done.

~Poison

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Poison :) Glad you liked it :)
Beautifully surrendered, I do believe that when the heart is captivated to such full throttle, there is no other option but to speak of it...hope balanced and tangible...lovely piece...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Poppy :) I appreciate your review my friend :)
The thing about free verse poetry to me is how it flows. That's what I really love about it. I used to hate reading anything that didn't rhyme. But now that I'm much older I have deep respect for people who can write so freely without even rhyming. The arrangement of the words, everything is awesome about this piece.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much.. I am a fan of free verse, but myself I find it more difficult to write without.. read more
Wow I loved reading this, the way every person would love to feel at some point. I would so take the chance with all those feelings and emotions running through my veins and in my heart. That would be one lucky person to be loved and thought of in such a magical and intimate way

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Angelique :) I hope I get that feeling about someone else... definitely wont miss my chan.. read more
What the hell; take the chance! On the other hand, since you forgot who it was about.....

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

haha... I might be a little late now... maybe I'll just walk up to everyone I forgot about and read .. read more
Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

Good idea & Merry Christmas!
AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Merry Christmas to you too buddy!
This is.... beautiful. I don't know what else to say... It invokes a large quantity of emotions into my heart that I just don't know how to deal with! Which is exactly what a piece of writing should do.

I am appalled by this excellent piece of art, if this is some of your best work, you're going places! Absolutely amazing.

The emotion you put into the readers mind is invigorating and the details are heavenly. The structure of this poem just throws it all together with a nice little bow, giving reader pause when they should pause, flowing smoothly.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind words :) I appreciate it very much :)
Obscured by the Shadows

2 Years Ago

My pleasure
This is a very detailed yet very nicely written description of passion without love. The facts and the truth that intertwine into each other in this piece of poetry.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Brittany :) It's a little bit of a different write from what I've been writing .. read more
beautiful imagery and interesting use of religious imagery to convey love as a deeply spiritual experience - nicely done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Alias :) This is an older piece... a little different for me but I wanted to share someth.. read more

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