Just a feeling

Just a feeling

A Poem by AaronFreitas

The taste of your skin 

explodes 

passion into my heart.  

 

The touch of your body

launches 

my mind into a fanatical eruption.  

 

Indescribable 

is the sensation 

of being with you, 

knowing

only a miracle from God himself

can guide you to me

as if it was destiny.  

 

I feel as if I’m walking through heaven

and you’re behind a half open door… 

teasing me 

with the angel I am missing out on. 

 

Unlike any emotion I have ever felt before,

Your inner beauty 

brings me to my knees, 

begging God please, 

to let me explore 

a world of ecstasy with you- 

who brings upon me

an epiphany of the reality of my destiny;

just guide you to me. 

 

I do not want to go on living 

this way, 

knowing that I could

fill your heart

with love for eternity.

And even though you have love,

I find you here

with me.

On my mind

in my heart 

I’m attached emotionally.  

 

What am I to do

with this feeling 

I have no control of?  

Should I 

fade

before your eyes; 

leave you to be?

 

Or should I take this chance

and trust that you will see……


© 2015 AaronFreitas



Author's Note

AaronFreitas
This is a piece I wrote in December of 08... wish I remembered who it was about!
Edited to a format which I like much better than the free write I had. Thanks to Jan aka JayceeC :)

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This was really good, and full of true emotion, not just words. You wrote in a way that allows the reader to experience the feeling the speaker is experiencing as well, and that is a quality not many writers have, but all need so desperately.
Wonderful job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for the review and the compliments Anne :) I appreciate it very much :)



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Aaron, The best part of this poem, other than the fact that it is beautiful and can stand alone on that fact by itself, is the fact that it is not the dark, disabling ventures that you take me on so often. Lets return Aaron to that Aaron, that silver tongued Aaron of yester-year and smile to smile, celebrate a new poet.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

There isn't a hint of darkness in this one :) Appreciate your review buddy :)
Feelings can be complicated sometimes. Interesting write, keep it up!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

They definitely can be Maria... sometimes we care about and feel for someone and we never truly know.. read more
I'm in love with the last lines leaving the readers a question if you should go with it or keep your feelings to yourself. I think a lot of people will relate to this which is really good. I also love your choice of words it's written beautifully. Please keep on writing, you're amazing :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much :) I appreciate your kind words... I hope I find that feeling again someday :D
It's a beatiful poem. I remember a time that I had similar thoughts to it. Keep up the good work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Linzi :) Yeah those thoughts have faded... still don't remember who I wrote this for but .. read more
Emotions sustained in some wonderful lines, loved it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you my friend... I'm glad you loved it :)
This is beautifully tragic.... :) I love it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lost Rose :) Appreciate your kind words
This is so smooth and untainted. I love this because its raw yet totally has a polished quality that only you can give. Great Job

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Crystal :) I get what you're saying... I like raw writes they are my favorite... the most.. read more
Wow, this is a beautiful piece, emotions and passion all flowing deep in your words. Good work my friend.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Aayushi :)
This is beautiful. Thank you for sharing! Wow, the passion and emotion I feel is just driven by your words! Very inspiring work my friend!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Zane :) I am glad you liked it!
Whoa. That's what this is, whoa. That's what emotions are right? Just, whoa.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

haha thank you Meraki :) That is what emotions are :) Thanks for your review!

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