Just a feeling

The taste of your skin 

explodes 

passion into my heart.  

 

The touch of your body

launches 

my mind into a fanatical eruption.  

 

Indescribable 

is the sensation 

of being with you, 

knowing

only a miracle from God himself

can guide you to me

as if it was destiny.  

 

I feel as if I’m walking through heaven

and you’re behind a half open door… 

teasing me 

with the angel I am missing out on. 

 

Unlike any emotion I have ever felt before,

Your inner beauty 

brings me to my knees, 

begging God please, 

to let me explore 

a world of ecstasy with you- 

who brings upon me

an epiphany of the reality of my destiny;

just guide you to me. 

 

I do not want to go on living 

this way, 

knowing that I could

fill your heart

with love for eternity.

And even though you have love,

I find you here

with me.

On my mind

in my heart 

I’m attached emotionally.  

 

What am I to do

with this feeling 

I have no control of?  

Should I 

fade

before your eyes; 

leave you to be?

 

Or should I take this chance

and trust that you will see……

Author's Note

This is a piece I wrote in December of 08... wish I remembered who it was about!
Edited to a format which I like much better than the free write I had. Thanks to Jan aka JayceeC :)

Reviews

[Writer_next_door]

This was really good, and full of true emotion, not just words. You wrote in a way that allows the reader to experience the feeling the speaker is experiencing as well, and that is a quality not many writers have, but all need so desperately.
Wonderful job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review and the compliments Anne :) I appreciate it very much :)

[Stars and Whales]

This is beautiful. Thank you for sharing! Wow, the passion and emotion I feel is just driven by your words! Very inspiring work my friend!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Zane :) I am glad you liked it!

[Meraki]

Whoa. That's what this is, whoa. That's what emotions are right? Just, whoa.

[AaronFreitas]

haha thank you Meraki :) That is what emotions are :) Thanks for your review!

[nupur chauhan]

grt... awesomely described the word feeling in a relationship ... theres an extraoridinary crisp n freshness in ur words... nice piece of work

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you nupur :) I appreciate your review my friend :)

[nupur chauhan]

ur most welcome sir

[...]

Aaron...this is gorgeous! Rich in emotion and beautifully expressed. I loved it :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you lynn :) I was just wondering about you the other day... I haven't seen you in a while so it's nice to see you on here :) I appreciate your review :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

This is wonderful writing, well expressed and deeply felt, Aaron. Love sometimes leaves us out on a limb, so afraid to take a chance on it!

[AaronFreitas]

It definitely does Kelly. Sometimes it's about taking that chance and risking rejection.... the only way anything good can happen is by taking a chance :) I wish I would have followed the advice of today lol

[Emily]

Great poem!
I really liked it!
Keep on writing!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Emily :) Glad you enjoyed it my friend :)

[wordman]

well aaron it is a beautiful love poem my friend.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you wordman... beautiful isn't something I'm used to hearing with my writes but I'm starting to like it :) haha

[wordman]

well good for you !

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

As always, you bring the emotions you want to the surface. Your words make the audience, not just read but feel as well.

Beautiful as usual, my friend.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Nikki :) I always try to get the reader to feel what I feel through my words :) On a side note I watched Soaked in Bleach the other night and it made me think of you. Excellent documentary

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Aah. You, my friend, know me well. I have to agree, it was superb. By the way, thanks for talking with me the other night. It was nice to chat again, after not talking for a good, long while.

[AaronFreitas]

It was nice catching up :) Anytime :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice journey into want and passion. I like the gentle pace and hopeful ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Coyote :) It's a little different than most my pieces but I'm glad you still enjoyed it :) Appreciate it buddy :)

[Coyote Poetry]

It was very good and you are welcome.

[B]

i once was told
you know you are in love
when you feel
you just got so lucky
like you could never deserve this person

your words just say exactly that

and please remember who she is
because this is love lol :)

[AaronFreitas]

haha I am trying to Nisreen :) I think I may have remembered today who it was... I'm not 100 percent sure but I remember a certain situation. haha thanks for your review it's always nice to see you :)

[B]

:)
i stopped watching orange is the new black
i switched to really old movies
romantic classics :)

[AaronFreitas]

haha nice... I got hooked on the Walking Dead... became a zombie for a bit but now I am caught up lol... now I've been watching the Kurt Cobain documentaries and movies. The new Soaked in Bleach documentary on Netflix was really good :)

[B]

i love netflix lol
now that i am stuck on a couch but not for too long
i want to watch romantic stuff i wish there was a series of something like that

[AaronFreitas]

haha... lets see... there is The Affair on showtime... it's romantic for the side chick lol

[B]

really
i will check it out
that orange is the new black was too aggressive for me

[AaronFreitas]

haha yeah it's definitely a unique show :)

[B]

Have a great day Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

You too my friend :) I looked at the picture and the name and wasn't sure who it was at first lol... :)

[B]

lol
i am still me lol