Empty Soul

Empty Soul

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Originally a song I wrote way back Feb 10, 2008, changed a couple things so I could share. It was written about a specific moment in my life where things weren't good.

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Nothing's ever perfect
Nothing's ever fair
I look into these eyes
And see this blank stare

Frayed since my creation
Abandoned from the start
My mother never loved my dad
And it breaks my f*****g heart!

Made to disappoint
Destined to fail
Created for your laughter
Only I could never tell

I am so pathetic
It’s so sad to see
I am just a worthless liar
but that’s what you made of me

That’s why you did it
That’s why you left me empty
Torn between my family
And it’s not sad for you to see

Why me? Why me?
What did I do to deserve this empty destiny?
Why me? Why me?
Take my empty soul and leave me free to be

You gave me life
But left me in this empty hole
So take my life
And my empty soul

 


© 2016 AaronFreitas



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Wow....I'd share a song to answer this, but it's not on English, and i couldn't translate yet. . so ....

i can relate to this, all too well. (except for being a liar.)

but, take a quick note, we're all here for you :)
you're not worthless.
:)
you're one of a kind. no one could even think about asking for a better friend :)

i loved the write
full rating

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

1 Year Ago

And you're welcome.
AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Awesome song to read to by the way! Almost couldn't even read your review I have my guitar on my co.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

1 Year Ago

hehehe : )



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WoW!!!!
so powerful.....
sad and dark.......
always hunting for the light.........each one stays only for so long.........power to all of us.....

awesome song......
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Pushkar :) Glad you enjoyed it buddy! Always appreciate your reviews and suppo.. read more
You touched on your emotions well here good job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Michael :) Appreciate your comments buddy
Very strong emotion in this piece. Heart wrenching. Felt it :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Shielah :)
You have a good rhythm to it, it flows nicely. It's a very sad tone and it definitely evokes emotion. I liked it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Scarlett :) It's definitely dark but it gets the message across.... appreciate your revie.. read more
I can relate to this during a dark period of my life. Took me some time to find just what I was worth and to fill the hole instead of with a burning fire. Nicely written, I very much enjoyed reading this :) good vibes to you!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

It definitely is interesting... there are some pieces that I read and wonder where my mind was when .. read more
Ms. Twitch

1 Year Ago

Well good vibes to you then! Hope you get a stroke of inspiration. That awesome, that you got a coup.. read more
AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Definitely... thanks always my friend :)
Deeply emotional write. Though as I've told you before, I think, it needs a rewrite regarding the rhythm (as your other poem, I reviewed before). I could be a really good one if it had a more harmonic tune.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

I hear ya Vanessa :) This is another one of my old pieces. I haven't actually sat down and written.. read more
Wow . Very powerful and very relatable. I love the way you lay it all out. Keep sharing and venting. An excellent one, sir. ...:))))))

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Sami.... written to be a song about 8 years ago. Performed back in the day but I have no .. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

Wow. You are welcome. ...:))))
I know and can relate to these feelings very well...My older brother did the whole whole liar part so I know what you mean.
You are one of a kind and unique, no one like you and never will be.
Loved this a lot and thank you for sharing these words with so many who can relate to you and to this

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Your words mean a lot Angelique :) I appreciate your comments and glad you liked it :)
The flow to this is incredible. Very well written and full of emotion.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Riley :) I'm still trying to work on guitar to try and put this into a song.
Riley Justine

1 Year Ago

Yes! That would be amazing!
nice you all perfect I read your poem would you help me re write in my poem

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the review Samparkk... which poem of yours?

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