Time in sun and shadows

 

Time

How it paints

The face of the world

Seconds tick-talking

Minutes moving miles

Hours of sun and sea and sky

Days of drifting dreams

Time

Flowing like droplets in a river

Weeks in woven light

Months of moments

Years of yellow moons

Epochs and eras

Past and present

Time

Passing over the clock’s face

Autumn, winter, spring, summer

And then they come again

In ages rhythmical

Through generations untold

Spans of living space

Time

How it passes

Slowly, softly, sweetly

And as time passes

In sun and shadows

May your heart truly know

How I only love you more…

Reviews

[LJW]

Effective line breaks.
Excellent alliteration.

"And then they come again" I would suggest changing to "Only to come again."

The first 3/4 of your piece reads like poetry. The ending, however, reads more like a greeting card or a personal letter to a loved one.

I would suggest, if I may, that to keep the tone of the poem throughout, to replace the reference to loving this one person to a more general reference about love.

[vandana]

Beautiful......well writen poem. I like flow and rhythm of poem.

Slowly, softly, sweetly
And as time passes
In sun and shadows
May your heart truly know
How I only love you more…

Love transcends time and it is comforting !

[Tate Morgan]

It was a refreshing thing to see a poem I liked for once.It was great
Tate

[GYPSYLEAH]

Beautiful - What a picture you present with your work - Time flowing like droplets in a river - This is my favorite line - Thanks for sharing your lovely picture.

[BABSIE BEE]

WAW....fantastic work involving the seasons with time and Love. How very romantic and clever. Thanks again my friend.
Babsie Bee xx

[Stephanie Ann]

Absolutely stunning! The imagery of the first two stanzas had me lost in my own little world imagining it. I love the end the most... Love for someone grows with time and sometimes never stops. Fantastic as always :]

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Yes, beautifully Written

[Jessica M.]

As always, beautiful :]

[Wildfleour]

A beautiful write, brother.

My favorite lines:

"Weeks in woven light
Months of moments
Years of yellow moons"

[Adeline]

really good! it's awesome to see how you can compare things in poetry, it's like this whole poem is a metaphor comparing time to the world. and each simile inside the poem builds up the metaphor of the entire thing. nice write, keep it up!

[Helena]

This is a wonderful write.....my kind of poem! Beautifully written
and 'painted'. Very good job indeed! ~ Helena