Time in sun and shadows

 

Time

How it paints

The face of the world

Seconds tick-talking

Minutes moving miles

Hours of sun and sea and sky

Days of drifting dreams

Time

Flowing like droplets in a river

Weeks in woven light

Months of moments

Years of yellow moons

Epochs and eras

Past and present

Time

Passing over the clock’s face

Autumn, winter, spring, summer

And then they come again

In ages rhythmical

Through generations untold

Spans of living space

Time

How it passes

Slowly, softly, sweetly

And as time passes

In sun and shadows

May your heart truly know

How I only love you more…

Reviews

[LJW]

Effective line breaks.
Excellent alliteration.

"And then they come again" I would suggest changing to "Only to come again."

The first 3/4 of your piece reads like poetry. The ending, however, reads more like a greeting card or a personal letter to a loved one.

I would suggest, if I may, that to keep the tone of the poem throughout, to replace the reference to loving this one person to a more general reference about love.

[deeps]

This is just wonderful, and so beuatiful
You write the most amazing poems.

[We are young.]

This poem made me stop. Think and read it again. It kind of brought back some memories, reminding me that time does indeed pass. Through seconds, and years, and eras. and So on...

[Jinx's Heart]

This work brought almost a montage to my mind as I read it. I saw the seasons from my own childhood change thus leaving questions of the future seasons and what waited there for me. Absolutely wonderful piece of work. I'm so glad you shared this with me.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Delightful and loving ending to this beautiful ode. I like how you capture the cyclical nature of things. Well done as always.
Light,
Siddartha

[Brianna Brie]

This is so gentle and soft flowing that it reminds me of a lazy river. One that you don't mind floating down, soaking up the sun and loving the people with you. Beautiful write!

[emmajoy]

You always manage to gently touch a reader because, because .. you have the instinct and skill of a natural-born writer. Your words flow, side by side, line by line like a beautiful river. And, you always present your posts in an incredibly fine way, font, colour and graphic.

Time can work for and against people; here it shows it how it is when it comes to loving another person.

It's such a pleasure to review your work. Thank you for sharing, yet again.

[Raja]

"How I only love your poetry more..."

It is a brilliant piece written flawlessly for us it seems. For us who values time and its offerings in every bit of life.

Thank you.

Raja

[Sorry Infamous]

"Seconds tick-talking"
Great play on words...
you have a never ending well of wonderful creative ways and words to describe a love that will surely surpass time itself...