FOR YOU LIKE THE SUN

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I want to be for you like the sun on Winter’s snow... melting you... transforming you into raging rivers... torrents of Spring’s song... a wild fury of crystalline light in trembling, tumbling energy... awakened and unleashed to wonder's land... for you are anything but commonplace... a liquid lit desire only sleeping... when I see the world illumined in your eyes... I burn as the fires of a thousand daybreaks... shattering the powerless fragrance of night within... gaze at me now... let me become for you like the sun... 

Reviews

[Alexandria]

'a liquid lit desire only sleeping...'

That is excellent, this is excellent! I love how the end ties everything back together with you being the sun to she being snow and that it is not just a random and happy chance, but that she makes you burn bright enough to cause her to change state. That's gorgeous! An endless cycle of beauty, healing... passion.

[Sweets]

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL....beyond beautiful. Omg you're sooooo talented :')))
Loooooooooooooooooooooove your imagery!!!

[Heather's Musings]

Such a pleasure to see inside your dream. The last line created desire, every woman wants a man to speak to her that way. Such an exquisite piece of work, sensual and passionate.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

Wonderful! The raging rivers line is delicious, and I love "for you are anything but commonplace." Very sweet sentiments, and the set-up and delivery read smoothly and read really well. Wonderful words. :)

[Craba]

such a mystical, stunning write. Makes one dream. Awesome

[Jvl narasimharao]

It is really fantastic

[K]

exquisite words...your dream fluently streamed through my soul, ingraining it's mark deep into the heart.

"torrents of Spring’s song"

Lovely

[Newtothis]

Mystical and melodic and mellifluous...a lovely thing. Thank you for it

[Christina]

What a stunning poem...filled with beautiful imagery . This line is especially wondrous, " I burn as the fires of a thousand daybreaks... shattering the powerless fragrance of night within" What a marvelous piece of writing my friend, well penned.

[pumpkin head]

such a beuatiful uplifting piece, Quite enjoyable

[Craig Froman]

Thank you so much! I know you've slipped away for awhile, but I hope you'll be back soon. Wishing you peace for your days.