You

You

A Poem by Champagne
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A delusional fantasy, from the depths of my morbid heart

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You extend nimbly from your roots
sliding across the glass floor - 
The contours of your visage
dripping yellow blood.

Your coldness
shivers the room.
Twigs disintegrate 
into dust.
Open mouthed kisses
freeze in mid-air.

You keep your fingers locked
as orgasmic gasps
reverberate outside.
Somewhere
merry kids sing happy Christmas
hanging wild ornaments
on trees -

You send tremors 
down my spine -
looking at me
with purple eyes
as you tight lipped
weave
a brown rope
to hang you in clear view.

© 2010 Champagne


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Champagne
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mmm, this needs more space. what you have here is just a summary of something bigger. at least this is how i feel. the expression is very plastic, and although it is just a "delusional fantasy", as you call it, it does have a certain air of twisted reality. sometimes what we see is not just a fantasy - it's just reality differently perceived due to certain circumstances. and honestly, i don't give a damn about circumstances if the perception satisfies me - as it is in this case :).

Posted 13 Years Ago


I take it this was a dream it is a sad thing I cannot quite grasp it You write lucidly but this is something I cannot imagine as a reality but a dream

Posted 13 Years Ago


yes very mysterious and eerie! nice job though

Posted 13 Years Ago


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a mysterious and dark piece..a wrote a poem called You, it's amazing how one poem can differ from another..I am very impressed

Posted 13 Years Ago


surreal streaming at its best~ an eerie little beauty mixing traditional human days with the underbelly of darker sinews behind closed doors~ what amazing visuals~

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

whoa. I see you changed the ending. I like this better. It's morbid yet sensual and raw. more please. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


great dark piece. the description of the last ecstatic seconds before death done very well.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on December 26, 2010
Last Updated on December 27, 2010
Tags: love, melancholy, you, death, cold

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Champagne

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I have always wanted to be a writer since I was a child. Being a passionate person, I am smitten with literature in general and poetry in particular. I have tried my hand at writing intermittently .. more..

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